Liberty and Treachery

A poem?

In my last living seconds
On the threshold,
-as death beckons
With a withered hand,
-wrapped in shadows.
Persecuted, then executed
-by public gallows.
But still saluted, for my undisputed
Lyrical genius, I'm still hallowed,
Spittin' fire from the deepest bowels,
A deathly mix of poisonous vowels.

Hangman, let's play a game,
-set to death, for the criminally insane
The word?
That's a mystery.
Get it wrong, its the end of misery.
Hung out for treachery,
-set to see, the end of me.

My crime?
Murder.
But honestly, believe me,
I was justified to hurt her.
Outside, it was homicide.
But inside, it was genocide.
The extinction of my morals.
Cuz trust me I never hide,
-from any of my quarrels.

I didn't need a knife to kill,
my words assassinate, but still-
Backed by hate, I will-
-Desecrate for thrill.
Spiritually, I'm soulless
But empirically, you know this
That lyrically,
-I'm genius.
I don't need to think,
-I'll wing this.

Its an indication of the desecration
of our nation, when there's veneration
for the defecation on our music stations.

And those who speak free?
They're hung out like traitors
As indicators, so we see-
That free speech, feeds the rodents
-its misery
So in my final moments,
Here's my deepest condolence,
-To Liberty.

So set to the noose, I'll let loose
-my final crime, I now choose
To take the bruise.
The attacks.
The torture I incur,
The lashes on my back.
Will make me a martyr.
For all free speakers,
-they'll now speak harder.
In the flame of revolution,
-I'm the spark starter.

What started as a quest for vengeance,
And a final riddance
-of the corrupt Queen
By whose death I gained this sentence;
Has turned into something more.
A revolution.
And the conclusion, that we need a solution
To the deep pollution,
-of our minds.
The resolution?
We need to leave behind,
-the shackles by which we've been defined.
So even though, I'm the one being hanged,
Something has changed.
The people know now, the Royals are deranged.
My final words,
-will be repeated by the revolution I incurred:

"Veni, vidi, vici!
-I'm set free."
So today, call it treachery.
But tomorrow they'll remember me,
-Differently.
As the one who died,
-sacrificed for Liberty.

Author's Note

So I just started typing and let this kind of go wherever it felt like going. It kind of evolved as the thing went on. Most of it I was speaking out loud as I typed, trying to keep my fingers up with my words. Its a written freestyle, so to say. Let me know what you think ^^

Reviews

[Southern Cross]

This piece has a rhythmic beat. I could see it as a song and a damn good one at that !

[MachinaWriter]

Yeah, a lot of my older poems come out that way. Its my natural way of writing lol I'm glad you liked it ^^

[Hester Vane]

Excellently written and constructed. Full of rebellious and epic emotions and imagery! Brilliant

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Wow! Rebellious, deep, emotional, spoken loudly. I certainly agree you need to write more freestyles. This gave me chills it was so good! Probably one of my favorites written by you. Nicely done.

[MachinaWriter]

Wow! ^^ Thank you. That really means a lot lol I think I'll get back into doing this more often, then. Thank you again.

[Sirius King]

Rebellious poems are always music to my ears lol
great free style man!


my favorite stanzas:

Its an indication of the desecration
of our nation, when there's veneration
for the defecation on our music stations.


"Veni, vidi, vici!
-I'm set free."
So today, call it treachery.
But tomorrow they'll remember me,
-Differently.
As the one who died,
-sacrificed for Liberty.




100/100

[MachinaWriter]

Yeah, I thought you might like that first stanza you mentioned lol When I wrote it I was reminded of that poem you wrote about the music industry. I'm glad you liked it.

[MachinaWriter]

Plus, I couldn't resist putting "veni, vidi, vici" into this poem. lol

[Sirius King]

i like that quote as well
i was acually going to use it in a poem ive been thinking about
read morei like that quote as well
i was acually going to use it in a poem ive been thinking about
but combining it with the bible scripture saying " We are more the than conquerors"

good stuff

[MachinaWriter]

Isn't that verse in Romans? That would definitely be a good combination. I've been wanting to do something with the verse from I Corinthians: 13, that goes "When I was a child, I spoke as a child, I thought as a child, I reasoned as a child; But when I became a man I put away such childish ways."

[Sirius King]

WOW man,,, thats crazy..im workin on a poem called "Childish Ways" rite now...dealing with that exact verse...we need to do a callabo lol

[MachinaWriter]

lol Great minds think alike ^^
That would be awesome. I've never done a collab, so that would be cool. Maybe one of us write a stanza, and then the other do the next, then alternate. Or one of us write half and then the other do the other half.

[Sirius King]

ok thats whats up
stanza to stanza sounds cool

[MachinaWriter]

Sweet, let's have you start it and when you've worked out the first part, just send it to me in a private message.

[Sirius King]

ok kool, which topic did u wanna go with?

[MachinaWriter]

I was thnking of something along the lines of how when we grow up, we're faced with the harsh realities of the world and lose sight of our child like ideals. But I could work with something else, I'm pretty flexible lol

[Sirius King]

lol ok kool we can do that

[Kelsey]

Wow. You need to do some more freestyle, my friend. This honestly blew me away. I read the entire thing and still wanted more, because I felt like you could have easily kept going. Absolutely amazing. It seems so effortless, and it's just, so beautiful. Very nice job, as always. x

[MachinaWriter]

Yeah, this was fun. I stopped typing only once and that was right after I finished the whole "its an indication of the desecration of our nation..." stanza. I wrote that before I even had time to think about what I was writing and actually had to read it over to make sure that what I typed actually made sense lol Then I jumped in again and didn't stop until I was done. I'm glad you liked it. It was definitely fun to watch it evolve in front of me. ^^

[RachelReaper]

this one reminded me of a little chant for some reason, but in a more solemn way. It fit the atmosphere of this month right now, what with all the death and scary poems going around, you did a nice job on this.

[MachinaWriter]

I honestly had no idea where I was going with this when I typed it up lol Once I typed about the gallows, though, I kind of ran with that whole theme of someone being hung for treason and starting an uprising of sorts. I enjoy it when poems kind of evolve on their own. I'm glad you liked it ^^

[RachelReaper]

:)

[MachinaWriter]

I had another one called New Orleans Man that I did recently that I feel fits into the whole theme of this month, kind of. Check it out if you get the time ^^

[RachelReaper]

ok, I'll check it out later.