Just Love Her

Let me know what you think, I could use some critiques...

 All alone, you once did find me

Hidden away, the world behind me

Calling back, “Oh, don’t deny me”

 

But I couldn’t miss, when we first kissed

my only wish

That you’d dance there beside me

 

I knew right then you’d be the one

to stop the storms and bring the sun

I loved her

 

And I saw in you what I should do

to save your heart from turning blue

Just love her

 

I used to think

There’s nothing for me

I was alone

But without a warning

I found you here

By me every morning

 

And as I sit

I wonder how

This came to be

But you’re waking now

 

Every day, I’m falling in

Love with you, all over again

And as you smile

When you wake

I kiss you soft

To try and take

The smile in my heart

 

And I crawl beneath the cover

To hold you close, my constant lover

Who made me see, and discover

I’d never need, a single other

For then and always,

I would love her

 

Your heart and mine had seen a time

when love was gone, nowhere to find

But now I love her

 

And I promise you, 

-even if you sleep til noon

when you wake you’ll be taken soon

By my lips upon your’s too

My lover

 

Because I knew right then, as I always had

That to make her smile when she’s sad

Just love her

Author's Note

Wrote this kinda quickly, so its not edited or anything. Let me know what you think. I may come back some other time and polish it up a little bit. Either way, let me know your thoughts on it ^^

Reviews

[Southern Cross]

You shine in love's light..I could feel your heartbeat in this..Never change, dear poet..keep that alive and beating always

[MachinaWriter]

And don't stop seeking it, alright? I know that your heart wants that kind of love more than anything. Let your heart keep beating towards that love.

[MachinaWriter]

There's a reason its called a heart "beat". Because when you let it, it'll beat back anything in your way.

[Kenaz]

Beautiful, funny thing is that I did miss when I kissed my love for the first time haha. Yet another wonderful piece of your heart.

[JodieH]

Really powerful, showing how love can make you realise how happy you are now and how the life of someone else can brighten any day rain or shine! Loved it!

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you ^^ I have plenty more so be sure to let me know what you think. I try to write a poem a day for my fiance.

[JodieH]

That's really nice, if you could have a look at mine too I would appreciate it a lot! Thanks :)

[Apatheia]

This is absolutely wonderful. I love the lines "I knew right then you’d be the one/ to stop the storms and bring the sun". Once again, I love it.

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you so much. Actually, those were the first lines I wrote, even though they weren't the beginning of the actual poem.

[MissEpic2902]

This is a truly beautiful piece!! I loved the flow!!

[b.platte]

Awweee. This was so sweet!

'When you wake
I kiss you soft
To try and take
The smile in my heart'

Absolutely loved that part.

[Kelsey]

This made me tear up, it's just so beautiful. Please tell me you showed this to your fiance. It's so lovely, it's like your love for her just falls into words. As always, amazing job. Your writing never gets old.

[MachinaWriter]

I haven't shown it to her quite yet, I wanted to polish it up a little first. Probably tomorrow. lol Oh, and I wrote another one. The Drive. Let me know what you think ^^

[Kelsey]

I sure hope I get a message telling me her reaction, I'm sure it'll be a priceless one. And will do.