I'd Love to here your call

A little poem I wrote a while back finally edited earlier today so I decided to post it up. Probably still lots of grammar problems though feel free to criticize :)

when this world falls down I'll have only you
when the ocean tides drown to the ground
I pray to god that we won't hear a sound
so maybe you can spend one more second with me
before our bodies and souls disappear to the sea
when the mountains collapse
and the fire comes down
I hope you will still be there in my arms
while the rest of the world is in bomb shelters
I hope you'll be in my arms
maybe just maybe our love will be able to disarm
the most powerful attack
I am not worried about tomorrow
I am only concerned for today
I hope in the madness that you won't go away
disaster or not
to me you're all I got
you're the only thing that's important to me
from the stars to the sky to the ocean to the sea
if they all disappear
I hope darling that you will stay near
together we can stand , maybe together we can fall
none the less
I'd love to hear your call

Reviews

[Orion Scarlett]

this is a really nice poem. I liked the ideas, and the poem created a beautiful image in my mind.
Just a suggestion: maybe next time organize it a little differently; I think it would benefit from that.

[Silver_Anime]

wow this poem is pretty good! ^_^ i have nothing to criticize! i like it!