News, Soul-life & Verse

News, Soul-life & Verse

A Poem by Marianne Rose
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This is for Richard, who invited me to try his poetry structure. Taming my experience of this week's violence in verse.

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Streaming through the news
Stories that I choose
Based on headlines that entice me
Blocking out the joy
Prey to latest ploy
Led away from what I can be

Love-soul drifts away
So I join the fray
Like so many who are blinded
Armored for this war
Which side am I for?
"Neither one", I am reminded

Now I'm done with rage
Wept onto the page
I am left with sheer surrender
Calling back my soul
Stitching up the hole
I never meant to offend her

Standing in her light
Facing off the night
I will learn her way of loving
Measuring the hate
War will not abate
In unity will freedom ring

© 2016 Marianne Rose


Author's Note

Marianne Rose
Fives 'n Eights (or) Doubledown Style 3, Original form created by Richard W. Jenkin,
© 4 May 1987.
Check out Richard's poetry . . . I couldn't get this week's violence out of my mind, ran the gamut of reactions with a good friend, and then decided to try Richard's form with a very contained expression of my experience of violence in the news. I'm sure I'll be back to free verse just to let the turbulence out, but this was on my mind to try out.

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Hi, Marianne! : )

I think you've accomplished an exemplary success with this form, whether it is your first or hundredth time, and this serves to impress a point I've always felt is true: If one is a poet, they can take any form and make it their own, for a true poet should be able to compose skillfully in any form, about any topic … certainly more skillfully in some than others, but in any form, nonetheless.

You've faithfully followed the rules for this form, shown good flow and word choices, with easy enough rhymes to follow and grasp the emotion, feelings, and convictions of your heart, mind, and soul. Not a whole lot more could be expected from an artist, than to paint themselves vividly and concisely upon the canvases of their readers' conscious understandings, as you have here.

Remember, too: The manner (form) in which a composition is written is that which separates it from common language — makes it poetry, whether that form may be Free Verse, Free Style, a Sonnet, Villanelle, Quatrain, or one of a proliferance of other poetical forms. The more one learns, practices, and utilizes, the broader, deeper, and more powerful their poetic skills become and the more capable and all-encompassing the poet becomes prepared and able to compose in whatever form is most appropriate for the topic, feeling, moment, emotion, inference, nuance, timbre, etc; in whatever poetic-voice will most powerfully and succinctly get it across to their readers … much in the way there is a best fitting musical note, harmony, score, rhythm, and timing that best conveys that which the musician wishes to express outwardly and creatively from their depths, and what artist would shirk the full array of colors, hues, and textures at their behest to blend upon their palette, to sing upon the canvas?

Not everyone will realize their highest potential, this I well know, but never limit yourself, choke-off your potential, or knock any other form of poetry … everything fits most perfectly something, and if you have that capability to utilize it when needed, desired, and ready … you will have become a master poetess or poet, more fully mature, more fully capable.

Marianne, I haven't appropriate words to convey the depth of feeling you've inspired by giving one of my forms a try, except to say I am humbled and gratified beyond measure by the quality of your excellent effort … bless You for blessing me, and thank you so very much for mentioning my name and crediting my form! ⁓ Richard

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Marianne Rose

8 Years Ago

Wow, Richard, I am spellbound not only by your affirmation of my efforts, but also the wonderful met.. read more
Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Marianne,
You are truly a delight!
I'd love to invite you to join my classes, but they.. read more



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I feel the emotions through this write... Your words always convey some important meaning and they come out from your experience with life, to write what you feel and experience is not an easy thing to do frnd, so I'm glad to be a reader of your soul...

About the form, well Richard sir is an experienced poet and to use his forms so beautifully is an amazing feeling... You did exceptionally well to convey the feelings as well as the form...

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 8 Years Ago


Marianne Rose

8 Years Ago

Thank you Dhiman- as I have talked more with Richard I have learned so much about how a poet can wri.. read more
Hi, Marianne! : )

I think you've accomplished an exemplary success with this form, whether it is your first or hundredth time, and this serves to impress a point I've always felt is true: If one is a poet, they can take any form and make it their own, for a true poet should be able to compose skillfully in any form, about any topic … certainly more skillfully in some than others, but in any form, nonetheless.

You've faithfully followed the rules for this form, shown good flow and word choices, with easy enough rhymes to follow and grasp the emotion, feelings, and convictions of your heart, mind, and soul. Not a whole lot more could be expected from an artist, than to paint themselves vividly and concisely upon the canvases of their readers' conscious understandings, as you have here.

Remember, too: The manner (form) in which a composition is written is that which separates it from common language — makes it poetry, whether that form may be Free Verse, Free Style, a Sonnet, Villanelle, Quatrain, or one of a proliferance of other poetical forms. The more one learns, practices, and utilizes, the broader, deeper, and more powerful their poetic skills become and the more capable and all-encompassing the poet becomes prepared and able to compose in whatever form is most appropriate for the topic, feeling, moment, emotion, inference, nuance, timbre, etc; in whatever poetic-voice will most powerfully and succinctly get it across to their readers … much in the way there is a best fitting musical note, harmony, score, rhythm, and timing that best conveys that which the musician wishes to express outwardly and creatively from their depths, and what artist would shirk the full array of colors, hues, and textures at their behest to blend upon their palette, to sing upon the canvas?

Not everyone will realize their highest potential, this I well know, but never limit yourself, choke-off your potential, or knock any other form of poetry … everything fits most perfectly something, and if you have that capability to utilize it when needed, desired, and ready … you will have become a master poetess or poet, more fully mature, more fully capable.

Marianne, I haven't appropriate words to convey the depth of feeling you've inspired by giving one of my forms a try, except to say I am humbled and gratified beyond measure by the quality of your excellent effort … bless You for blessing me, and thank you so very much for mentioning my name and crediting my form! ⁓ Richard

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Marianne Rose

8 Years Ago

Wow, Richard, I am spellbound not only by your affirmation of my efforts, but also the wonderful met.. read more
Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Marianne,
You are truly a delight!
I'd love to invite you to join my classes, but they.. read more
you did a really good job of using form...and getting your feelings across in this...
this has been an awful week.
thank you for this poem....

j.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Marianne Rose

8 Years Ago

Thanks J., not my usual style, so I appreciate that feelings came across. I just posted my usual sty.. read more

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Added on July 8, 2016
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Tags: Violence, poetry, war, soul, freedom, unity

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Marianne Rose
Marianne Rose

Santa Rosa, CA



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