Old Man River

Sometimes I glimpse your face in the pink tinged dawn

It’s of love and grace and nothing to mourn

Sometimes the tears bruise my heart

And I am torn apart

Sometimes I wake in the silence of the night

Every word you spoke alight

Sometimes I wonder how it is

And where we find release

From the coldness of death

How do we waken from our bed?

Sometimes I know love continues to grow

Even after the grim reaper sows

Sometimes all I need is a word

A hundred lifetimes for your voice to be heard

Sometimes I hear you tiptoe in my soul

And for a moment I find the broken pieces, I am whole.

Reviews

[r. f. jordan]

incredible gift to be able to read such vision, brilliance to be able to write with it. this is a poem that flows as a river, about a river, and a reality that has often been compared to a river. all three flow simultaneous within these words. beautiful.

[I Shred This Cabbage]

this is beautiful. darkly elegant.


Sometimes I wake in the silence of the night
Every word you spoke alight

that's the line right there!

[EMF]

Both haunting and plantive this is a beautiful work that breathes both love and sorrow with such intensity. Your language is perfectly matched to the theme, concentrating on soft vowels and soft phrases to relax the reader and draw them into your word and experience perfectly. A wonderful poem.

This is striking, haunting and a wonderful piece of written art Moon, you are the reflection to the sun, and whole once a month, when you shine so profoundly, especially if you make the most beautiful lion-eyed sunsets. The missing is always the most romantic, and when you have it, it can be fragile. Excellent work.

E.L.

[khalid]

i know my review will be just repeated words if i talk about how much it is nicely written with nice words picking nice flow and rhyme..but i have to say that i liked it so much

[Audrey Howitt]

There is a depth to this piece that is moving--you express your vulnerability here so very well!

[Blindfolded]

The memories that hold this sorrow can be painful to deal with. You have done a wonderful job expressing all of of your feelings and thoughts in this poem. We all dream of being whole, don't we...

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Moon, I have been meaning to sample your delights...this is a very good appetizer :)

[An owl on the moon]

Such a poignant depth to your words.. life moving on in rivers of thought and feelings... bringing us fragments of our world, and giving us meaning... if just for moments. Profound.

[joshua deathdealer]

Beautiful and well written. Much enjoyed.

[Manpreet]

Beutiful piece! Love and pain both accurately expressed!!