Everlasting

Everlasting

 

When you lock the heart

Every day seemingly dark

The brisk wind keening your name

Mockingly calling love is a game

 

Of smoke and mirrors

False endearments

The sun rises and sets

On screaming regrets

 

Yet the key to your soul can be found

Its always lying around

Waiting in quiet desperation

To unlock the veiled deception

 

You won’t heed the call

Loving is the final fall

A study in powerless emotion

Encased in passion and devotion

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

Your poem is a poignant exploration of the complexities of love and the ways in which it can both inspire and torment us. The use of metaphor, such as the "brisk wind" and "key to your soul," creates a sense of movement and urgency that draws the reader in. The final lines, with their focus on the power and vulnerability inherent in loving someone, add a layer of emotional depth and resonance to the poem, inviting readers to reflect on their own experiences of love and heartbreak.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

A fab lovely poem in great rhyming stanzas. You express in fine rhythm and meter, i liked the mirror verse soo much. Kudos!!

Plz do read and comment my newest poem too

[MOON]

thank you will stop by soon

[Fran Marie]

too many games are played making
love deceitful and filled with mixed
emotions confusing the players
deceptions of the heart is no
good for anyone..nice work

[MOON]

Thanks Fran appreciate your time

[John the Baptist]

"A study in powerless emotion." An apt description here for romantic love, the kind made popular by so much music. People think they will find the "right" person who will deliver them from their unhappiness. Then they discover they've bound themselves to someone just as desperate. Two unhappy people have found each other and now can't wait to get out of it.

[MOON]

True , your review made me smile , thank you

[Chris Shaw]

Love is a game for some people. Smoke and mirrors and deception can play its part. We are all responsible for how we behave. Deception is not a pleasant way to act. Good to see a new post from you Moon.

Chris

[MOON]

Thank you Chris take care

[Sami Khalil]

You are waxing poetical and blazing philosophical. Every time you come back, you come back with a good one. You are excelling.

[MOON]

Ha ha , waxing lyrical, hope you good dear friend so good to hear from you.

[Sami Khalil]

:::::)))))))......................

[Sami Khalil]

"Yet the key to your soul can be found

Its always lying around

Waiting in quiet desperation

To unlock the veiled deception"

[Neville]

.. I thoroughly enjoyed this introduction to your poetry portfolio my friend and mark my words, I fully intend to investigate and explore further ............ All Good Things, Neville :)

[MOON]

Thanks Neville , truly appreciated.

[Neville]

... no probs my sincere pleasure entirely :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I think all of what is in this poem is so true, Moon.
Love the description and it made me think of this.
We can only control how we love, not how the other person does...
And even with the "screaming regrets" the pain will die down eventually,
and we know of our own "passion and devotion."
j.

[MOON]

Thank you Jacob , so true

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree my friend. Old age had taught me. I need a kind woman and I would be kind to her.
"You won’t heed the call
Loving is the final fall
A study in powerless emotion
Encased in passion and devotion"
I liked the above lines. When the love is true. The people need to hold hands and they love the voice of their mate. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[MOON]

Thank You Coyote , hope all well.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend. I am fine and I hope you are doing well.