Midnight Flowers

 

Don’t tell me I am not to dance amongst the midnight flowers

Walk away pretend the hours of winning your core is done

That it is my heart you shun and there is no April showers

 In the brace of your hold so tight your heart can’t be won

When the door slams on this fiery sunset your presence end our hours

Still I remember that in your weakening love flowers

Don’t tell me there can be no beauty in the breaking dawn

In that quintessential moment in eternity I was born

 

 

Reviews

[Jane Taylor Hardy]

Beautiful piece....stunning! Thank you for sharing your talent!

[Sheila Kline]

Romance, commitment, endearment all within the words of your poem that leave a beautiful fragrance in the air! Yes, dance amongst the midnight flowers and remember that which is special to you!

[MOON]

Thanks Sheila , take care.

[writing mojo]

i like the drip drop rhythm as if tears
could paint the scene on skin trembling
from what poetry can blossom to release
excellent piece

[MomzillaNC]

Terrific imagery.

A couple of small edits: "…there [are] not April showers"
"…on this fiery sunset, your presence [ends]" [not the comma after sunset too]

I was a little lost on the line, "weakening love flowers" Is that meant to be a thing, a type of flower, to be "love flowers" growing ever weaker?

[MOON]

Thanks for your time and input , appreciate it, yes "are" for sure! Missed that , punctuation not my strong point so I took poetic license and dispensed with it entirely. Oh dear!

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome. I find reading really good writers helps me. Georgette Heyer and Peter Mayle are exceptional, and, in fact, use punctuation excellently.

[MOON]

Thanks I do read but don't pay attention to punctuation, a huge failing ....ha that's my excuse and I am sticking to it. Go well!

[MomzillaNC]

LOL! I usually try to go back and add punctuation, trying to use to lead my reader where the poem took me while composing it. But, I seldom use punctuation in the first draft, just letting the words flow.

[Frontier]

"Walk away pretend the hours of winning your core is done" - This line is great, it is so true, we do it all the time. :)

[MOON]

Thank u
Most appreciative.

[TL Boehm]

Don’t tell me there can be no beauty in the breaking dawn

In that quintessential moment in eternity I was born

this is lovely.

[MOON]

Thank you, go well.

[paul sal.....]

no may flowers if no april showers, ultimate beauty is on the other side of dawn

[MOON]

Thank you!

[Salem]

Awesome poem and I liked your rhymes

[MOON]

Thank you most appreciated. Will stop by soon.

[Fran Marie]

a most creative and enchanting piece of writing ....beautifully penned in poetic expression

[MOON]

Thanks Fran appreciate your review. Take care.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

simply Beautiful.



very lovely and sweet.


Don’t tell me there can be no beauty in the breaking dawn

In that quintessential moment in eternity I was born



Thank you for Sharing this Beautiful piece.


Blessings. Kindred poet

[MOON]

Thank you for your kind review. Go well!

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

You're very welcome my friend. It's my pleasure. Blessings. Kindred poet