Journey

 

 

Look clearly into my eyes tell me what you see

Beyond the cracked mirror to heart that is me

There are my steps in the maroon dance of my life

Do I see the lilac calm after years of strife

 

Tell me at the quiet end of the rainbows arc

Is it where light finds the end of the seamless dark

And then I will tell you of the grace of the soul

Perhaps where once I was broken now I am whole

 

Yes in sorrow there are things to have and to hold

Shards that turned into crystal dreams now just pure gold.

See the fragile warrior charging through this world

All the bitter seeds now in full promise unfurls

 

Look clearly into my eyes tell me what you see

Here is my state this is where I was meant to be

With the sorrow of dark journeys I travelled far

I am both the full crimson sun and the lone star

Reviews

[SyberRose]

Beautifully penned...The stanza's compliment each other nicely...Enjoyed...Rose

[MOON]

Thanks you so very much , take care!

[kublakhan27]

Recalls the days of the Romantics, both in feeling and technique...I really like how the colours compliment the imagery, it brings the piece to life...great work Moon :)

[MOON]

Thank you Dear Friend , take care!

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure, same to you :)

[ms. barrie]

This is simply breathtaking...every word you chose, how you used them. The imagery you captured in this poem is absolutely stunning! Brilliant write! 100/100...thanks for sharing :)

[MOON]

Thank you so much for your kind words , take care!

[ms. barrie]

you're very welcome, you too! :)

[gabrielle]

i like the repetition of this line "Look clearly into my eyes tell me what you see." Our life's journey is a reflection of the journey of the souls around us as we all experience some ups and down but with a difference on how we handle life's has to offer. very well-penned!

[MOON]

Thank you appreciate the review, take care!

[rhythm&blues]

"Do I see the lilac calm after years of strife?" How genius a way to put it, I've often thought this but never as lovely as you wrote it, I love this one, great job.

[MOON]

Thank you so much , will stop by soon, take care!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

after the dark journey and all the pain...where are we?

poets are fragile warriors in one sense, but i think our writing helps us survive...

this is my state!

i really like this poem...really like the line about the cracked mirror...

nicely done, Moon.

jacob

[MOON]

Thank you so much always look forward to your reviews.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow . The ups and downs of life and love . The good and the bad encounters . The wars within and the piece . In proper perspective we try to find a balance amidst the suffering that comes from so many directions . You hsve penned a sad but lovely rhyming poem . Thank you for sharing...:)

[MOON]

Thanks Sami for your lovely review.

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)

[Dhaye]

Life is a journey. We encounter both joy and sorrow. When we look at our own reflection, we can see how far have we been...how long we cry, or we laugh.

Profound write. Good rhyme. Nice job.

[MOON]

Thanks Dhaye for your kind words.