Journey

 

 

Look clearly into my eyes tell me what you see

Beyond the cracked mirror to heart that is me

There are my steps in the maroon dance of my life

Do I see the lilac calm after years of strife

 

Tell me at the quiet end of the rainbows arc

Is it where light finds the end of the seamless dark

And then I will tell you of the grace of the soul

Perhaps where once I was broken now I am whole

 

Yes in sorrow there are things to have and to hold

Shards that turned into crystal dreams now just pure gold.

See the fragile warrior charging through this world

All the bitter seeds now in full promise unfurls

 

Look clearly into my eyes tell me what you see

Here is my state this is where I was meant to be

With the sorrow of dark journeys I travelled far

I am both the full crimson sun and the lone star

Reviews

[FateDictates]

aghh you are that person who makes you want to read, and even my short attention was caught up in your easy solemnly square solid sentences..

[MOON]

Thank you so much for stopping and reading my older work. I am so appreciative, will stop by soon. Take care.

[prince]

Beautifully described the journey of life. Keep it up. Preety good and nicely rymed. Loved it

do check out my short story i posted and contribute your valuable reviews

[MOON]

Thank you will do !

[Pax]

so beautiful, sad yet sweet and complete... a short story in verses of poetry, dance in the starlight...
a closer look of what the soul yearns...
it's a shiny piece you have here...

[MOON]

Thanks Pax , take care.

[Will Neill]

Moon, to me this is proper poetry-I very much like the old style of writing. Wonderfull read.
Will

[MOON]

Thanks Will , glad you enjoyed! Go well.

[Frieda P]

Mesmerizing, awe inspiring read MOON, this is one of your best in my opinion, simply lovely & bittersweet at the same time.

There are my steps in the maroon dance of my life
Do I see the lilac calm after years of strife

Love this...

[MOON]

Thanks Frieda , I am honoured that you enjoyed. Go well!

[Dayran]

A lovely poem that says in song what the world says in scriptures. Perhaps we need more of this ... it is after all the truth that we live as a part and life. Nicely done Moon.

[MOON]

Thank you most appreciated, take care!

[Rita L. Sev]

Wonderful use of color words here, adding a vivid depth. Really nice flow to this piece - great poem, Moon.

[MOON]

Thanks Rita, take care!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

This has a reflective theme:

Look clearly into my eyes tell me what you see

The mirror can tell you the good and the bad... yet life is about both... and not one sided as one looks at the mirror... and ask the question:

Look clearly into my eyes tell me what you see

and you end this with the end line:

I am both the full crimson sun and the lone star

Which seals the whole write for the reader....

[Prritiy]

A heart which is strong and delicate both, a life which has pain and hope too.
A beautiful write which touches the heart with its pain and brings in the hope too of standing up again.
liked it a lot.
best wishes

[MOON]

Thanks Prritiy, go well!

[Prritiy]

you are welcome.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

How mesmerising, this astonishing figure with delicately arousing words, articulated so artfully with shades and colour, with eyes of the full crimson sun and of a star, really outstanding writing Moon!

[MOON]

Thank you Sheema for such a beautiful review.
Take care.