WC: Soldiers Unfortunate

 

So I wrote a little poem

put it on a site

hello darling it’s my own

my  ego’s taken flight

then you came along

looking for a fight

told me

   so many things

 were  not right

 it’s way too long

and boring

my tenses

 and spelling

 all  just wrong

now I began

 to foam

so I’ll just pick

 your bone

Yes, I know you are

 in the ether

let me tell you please

 Sir

I am fragile

someone

 let me have

my fun

While I bash

your head

With  one

 or three

cutting

 stings

there we were

two strangers

Monologues,

 dialogues and

 Lone Rangers

heading for the sunset

 slinging at the hips

I tell you dear

 this place

just gives me

the creeps

online

 attacks

 and defences

 just makes me weep

Now they tell me in Syria

 there is a real war

needing real soldier

 fighting at the door

WC to the rescue

 Bringing muscles

 let’s begin

The way we fight

 online

 Surely we will

 Win

Author's Note

With apologies to Baby Ricochet , copying your style is the sincerest form of flattery.
This is tongue in cheek!

Reviews

[Amadi Judith]

copying people's style is very common. I am hoping no one has copied mine, while I somehow copied one that narrates in the middle of the poems. Not the best style I have seen but I was sort of bullied into it. we are all here to learn and without saying much your poem was great. I score a 90. the lines were very short and there should be more depth. thanks.

[MOON]

Thank you will stop by soon! Take care.

[Lina Grey]

ha! the enemy wouldn't stand a chance! great write Moon, very funny

[MOON]

Thank you most appreciated!
Go well!

[Lina Grey]

:)

[CS]

Ha!

Oh moon, you crack me up :)

[MOON]

Thanks Courtney , thought I would try something new!
Take care

[TL Boehm]

Yup. This is a great poem - and gets my head nod - even if it is tongue in cheek (and I found it humorous) it is also true. My WC addiction has been such an inspiration and positive force for writing. It has also made me ball up on the ground and cry. Well penned. Made me smile.

[MOON]

Thank you for the lovely review, most appreciated.
Take care!

[Bare trees]

Glad to see this made the feature page, it deserves a spot there. Too much crap going on here on this site and many are leaving because of it. Nice poem.

[MOON]

Sad, stick to the writing , slay them with the mighty pen!

[Bare trees]

It ran out of ink a while ago. :)

[MOON]

I will ship you another one!

[Bare trees]

:)

[Leslie Philibert]

I got a bit lost here, from poetry to Syria, but I believe too this terrible war should end !

[Muse]

In otherwords...lets focuse our energy elsewhere. I can see the parody behind your words...yet I still understand the wisdom being shared.

[MOON]

More important things in the world I would imagine, take care , appreciate you stopping by.

[Dhaye]

"There is a real war which needs real soldiers."
Nicely done. :)

[MOON]

Thank you , take care!

[gombeggar]

well done...nicely thoughtful end

[MOON]

Thanks , much appreciated , take care!

[journaling_thesp]

Very well penned indeed :) it was a much appreciated in reading

[MOON]

Thank you , will top by read some of your work soon! Take care