Fragile

Fragile

So shattered a mind that breaks in song

Weeping sad tunes and echoing words

You the split mirror for far too long

Now in pieces flying with the birds

 

In the rose silence of the hour

Where the wind blows and rattles the bones

I wonder if the late spring shower

Would grace the fragile mind now alone

 

Once you caught my eye held out a hand

Tenderly grasping at the straws of love

Now you have taken the olive wand

Retreating grey folds of a shy dove

 

Sing now my heart to the skies so clear

Solitary ballad on your own

Is it the human touch you now fear

That makes your heart turn into bleak stone

 

You now marching to your own drumbeat

Is this protection or just defeat.

 

Author's Note

Major depression

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

"You now marching to your own drumbeat
Is this protection or just defeat."
It is defeat. I have known people who had nothing left. Most got strong again and learn to survive with different tools and goals. I like your description. Some stories have a bad ending. Old world need a tender touch today. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[MOON]

Thanks Coyote, having read your work I know you have been touched by this. Take care!

[Southern Cross]

Depression has taken my ability to write at times as I need the intensity of passion to turn my thoughts into words. I understand the lost feeling here and written in such a beautiful piece.

[MOON]

Thank you for the review , always appreciate your thoughts.take care

[kublakhan27]

This struck me to the core...someone with bipolar would strongly relate to this...an astounding piece of writing.

[MOON]

Thanks , seeing someone go through this not always easy!

[kublakhan27]

I understand wholeheartedly.

[Frieda P]

You've painted a perfect picture of deep depression here.

Great line...'That makes your heart turn into bleak stone'

Certainly can feel that way, good one MOON!

[MOON]

Thanks for stopping by Frieda appreciate your thoughts.take care

[Bare trees]

Depression takes control over a fragile mind. Indecision leads to self-protection from what I've seen. I like the last line. Good poem Moon.

[MOON]

THanks most appreciated. Take care!

[sharonlee]

Potent honesty here... crafted with feeling.

[MOON]

Thank you Sharonlee, will stop by soon. Go well!

[Aidz]

Considering the note and what the write is about, this write is crafted with care, a touch of the creators soul and actual experience

Thank you for sharing

[MOON]

Thank you Aidz , glad to see you stop by, take care! Yes hard to see someone in pain!

[Aidz]

Empathy there abounds

[FJ Davis]

Depression starkly portrayed--a condition that cannot trust common sense, destroys all but the bleakest expectations and disallows joy.
"Fragile" well and artfully captures the Black Dog.

[John]

The metre goes awry in a few places, but for the most part is very well constructed. It is beautiful and sad and with some stand out lines like 'So shattered a mind that breaks in song'.

[MOON]

Thanks I am a work in progress metre confuses me . Take care!

[sierrasparks91]

Wonderfully written, very beautiful I think everyone can relate to this.

[MOON]

Thank you , most appreciated.

[quinfinn]

"is it the human touch you now fear that makes your heart turn into bleak stone" this line expresses the whole concept for me, personally. superb writing here, Moon.

[MOON]

Thanks you so much ! I so appreciate it.