Caged Heart

 

 

It did not matter my voice had no sound

You took love's rope and around me you wound

You captured my heart with a serpent sting

Taught me the caged bird’s song and how to sing

 

Then you placed all your sorrows on my face

All you loved about me you laid to waste

So I could be emptied of who I am

Looked at me said all I was, was a sham

 

Then still you had to deal just one more card

That you would grant me like a piercing dart

On a dawn full of promise you would go

That was your last hurrah your final blow

 

Obsession still my iron fisted glove

Days still I am imprisoned by your love

Reviews

[CS]

They cage the bird. They tell it that it does not deserve freedom. They make the bird believe it deserves its fate. They clip the birds wings so that it can never escape. The tell the bird to sing out for their amusement. And the worst part, they manipulate the birds mind to make them think it was their choice. Then they leave and go about their life and tell you to fly. But how can the bird ever really escape until it grows new wings? It can't. It takes a long time to heal from that. Many days are spent in that prison waiting.

I have been in that cage. It is not a place I would wish upon anyone. Personally, this poem speaks to me very deeply. You have done a masterful job of giving a voice to a hurting bird. Wonderful work, dear Moon.

[MOON]

Thanks Courtney you hit the nail on the head often we are trapped by love .
Take care!

[R J Askew]

Lovely bitter love sonnet. I esp like the last two lines. Ach, tis sad, sad! beautifully sad.

[MOON]

Thank you for the review, most appreciated.

[Ken Simm.]

Romance with steel.

[MOON]

Thank you so much for stopping by most appreciated.

[Dalia]

very touching and inspiring words
I enjoyed it, really nice Moon

[MOON]

Thanks Dalia for your kind words.

[Carolann Dowsett]

This is amazing, to be captivated by someone so much and to fall deeply in love with them just to be crushed and emptied of all that you are, yet still to be forever imprisoned by the love you lost. Very raw and full of deep emotion. I thoroughly enjoyed this.

[MOON]

Thank you Carolann for the lovely review, you said it perfectly.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Welcome :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful and strong poem of love. Hard to get your heart caged up and to lose control. I like the description and the story in the poem. No weakness in the outstanding poem. I had to read twice.
Coyote

[MOON]

Thanks so much for stopping by, most appreciated.

[Lina Grey]

gorgeous penning. i love the metaphors and emotions. very powerful, poignant piece. love it

[MOON]

Thank you so much!

[Lina Grey]

you're welcome :)

[kublakhan27]

Devastatingly beautiful...I love this piece and sympathize wholeheartedly with it :)

[MOON]

Thank you , love your reviews.

[Tree]

The angst and emotion is off the chart, Moon. And that last stanza was wicked - vivid. That will stay with me for a long while. One side note. "I did not matter my voice.." not sure if this was a typo but maybe you meant "It did not matter... " That is the way I read it :)

DiegoP

[MOON]

Thanks Diego , I could not get the first line quite right, yes it does not matter much better, could not see the wood for the trees. Take care most appreciated.

[Sami Khalil]

"On a dawn full of promise you would go

That was your last hurrah your final blow."
That is some powerful write and clear confessions that awakens us to the reality of love and life.
Stunning write as alawys dear poetess.

[MOON]

Thanks Sami, love the new look !

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha. By orders of the lady ...Lol
Thank you though . You are welcome...:)