Caged Heart

 

 

It did not matter my voice had no sound

You took love's rope and around me you wound

You captured my heart with a serpent sting

Taught me the caged bird’s song and how to sing

 

Then you placed all your sorrows on my face

All you loved about me you laid to waste

So I could be emptied of who I am

Looked at me said all I was, was a sham

 

Then still you had to deal just one more card

That you would grant me like a piercing dart

On a dawn full of promise you would go

That was your last hurrah your final blow

 

Obsession still my iron fisted glove

Days still I am imprisoned by your love

Reviews

[CS]

They cage the bird. They tell it that it does not deserve freedom. They make the bird believe it deserves its fate. They clip the birds wings so that it can never escape. The tell the bird to sing out for their amusement. And the worst part, they manipulate the birds mind to make them think it was their choice. Then they leave and go about their life and tell you to fly. But how can the bird ever really escape until it grows new wings? It can't. It takes a long time to heal from that. Many days are spent in that prison waiting.

I have been in that cage. It is not a place I would wish upon anyone. Personally, this poem speaks to me very deeply. You have done a masterful job of giving a voice to a hurting bird. Wonderful work, dear Moon.

[MOON]

Thanks Courtney you hit the nail on the head often we are trapped by love .
Take care!

[Michael G.]

A lovely, sad write written in an easy flowing method that leaves a soft feel to the read.
Your thoughts are very true. We all have our cages. Some are filled by us and some we have filled. An excellent poem.

[MOON]

Thanks so much Michael will stop by soon.

[Prritiy]

a touching write from heart, liked it.

[MOON]

Thank you kindly.

[. - .]

This says so much, even in four paragraphs o.o
Unbelievable write.. Amazing..

[MOON]

Many thanks.

[John]

A great expression of the obsessive quality of love. I particularly liked the description of the winding of the rope.

[MOON]

Thank you so much John!

[Relic]

The way we affect other people in our lives can be profound though we may not know it. Some may change their thinking as a result. Some memories and feelings may last years. And some may never care what they've done at all. Another good write Moon.

[MOON]

Thank you so much always look forward to your reviews!
Take care

[Relic]

:)

[Mia]

Why is it that the pains that accompany love translate so beautifully into poetry!!
This is a wonderful write and it is easy to feel with you while reading this

[MOON]

Thanks Mia for stopping by, take care my friend!

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

your words and the picture are perfect together!

and the first stanza is amazing! it's my favorite.

[MOON]

Thank you so much for stopping by.
Take care

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goes Cascading!)]

my pleasure

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I felt that this was a somewhat mystical and retrospective tribute, riddled with mystery and romance, quite a unique verse

[MOON]

Thanks Sheema most appreciated!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

It is my pleasure, I like this poem a lot

[khalid]

it is really nice to have a tour in your garden of poetry...distinguished trip..reading this poem is the first flower i have picked from your garden..

[MOON]

Thanks Khalid hope all is well!

[khalid]

all will be well inshallah

[Emerald Seas]

So eloquently written, Moon. I hesitate to reply as I can relate all too well to the message. Sometimes I feel like the caged bird, other times I wonder if I was thought to be the one clipping wings without realizing it ... it is a situation I feel I will never be given the opportunity to fully understand. Or I may be delusional and they've happily gone about life without another thought to me. A paradox of such magnitude.
You're writing touched deeply. Wonderful writing, my dear friend.

[MOON]

Thanks Sirrah, we all caged in some way or form and indeed we can cage others too.thanks for your thoughts.
Take care