Lost

I looked to find you in the places I know

 in the corners where we used to go

 you were not there you were gone

i remember your eyes at two

 how they lit up at the sight of an open flame

 wide like a brown eyed dawn

now everything is black

 your eyes steel and  stoned

  you are now all Crystal Meth

programmed for a fix

 hurtling always to that desolate high

  raking in all kinds of debts

i looked to find you in the places I know

 in love where the heart grows

 you were not there you were gone

Now when all is said and done

Honey lets make a pact

 I am always open to hear

what  it is in your soul you lack

we looked to find you

in the quiet of our dreams

no Saving of the Souls

every moment we grow old  

knowing you are gone.

Reviews

[Frieda P]

This hits home, actually breathless. It's hard to lose someone to that deep abyss, to continually watch someone struggle with that torment that affects everyone.

'in the quiet of our dreams
no Saving of the Souls
every moment we grow old'

I feel you, and it's not a good one to be sure. Nicely penned for such a painful write.
knowing you are gone.

[MOON]

Thanks Frieda thats the word abyss , touches everyone in this world in some shape or form. Thanks for the review.

[Quill~]

I know this story very well. One of my best friends went through this. It hurts to watch. I felt helpless. You wrote a moving piece, gentle but profound.
"wide like a brown eyed dawn
now everything is black
your eyes steel and stoned
you are now all Crystal Meth"

[MOON]

Thanks , if only the pen could fix pain . Thanks for stopping by appreciated.

[Quill~]

If only....

It's my pleasure to read.

[Balkaran Sidhu]

beautifully penned moon.....the rhythm was so good..
heartbreaking!

[MOON]

Thank you my friend for the lovely review.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

It is heartbreaking when we lose a loved one to addiction. There is always hope that they will return and they can. Beautifully written Moon

[MOON]

Where there is life there is hope , yes indeed, thanks Neva for the review most appreciated.

[FJ Davis]

Profoundly touching and utterly heartbreaking.
You've penned it almost too well, dear Moon.

[MOON]

Wish I did not have to pen a write like this. Many thanks for your kind words.

[Tai Ryens]

I admit, the imagery has struck my fancy; and the finishing line has made this much more impactful than if it were without it. Well done.

[MOON]

Many Thanks!

[AK]

Wow! I loved this write :) it is so well written and eloquent. The imagery has been sculpted out beautifully. Great write, keep writing!

[MOON]

Lovely review , thanks.

[AK]

My pleasure!

[kublakhan27]

I really like the imagery in this one, with the colours and elements and so on...they all come together nicely...well done :)

[MOON]

Thank You so much.