Loving You

Days I remember cold in the summer heat

There was my heart body and soul there to bleed

All the dreams I desired slipped through my hand

Whipped by bone emotion I could barely stand

 

One day when hope was all but gone you were there

Standing tall catching my fall I could not care

A blink of an eye all anguish washed away

It seemed that night was suddenly turned to day

 

Now I hold you in my being soft summer rain

You cleansed wounds and disinfected my pain

You brought me gifts of art and inked storied writes

I could touch the lustrous sky and find new heights

 

Now I sit in splendour I could not go back

You pointed the track there is nothing I lack

In me all the golden dreams I sought in you

In homage captured heart you altered my view

Reviews

[J. J. Nightingale]

Love has such power ...

Beautiful ....... Jazzy :)

[N!LoC]

i really really adore your writing style and inspiration... if only i knew the specific inspiration behind it... :-)

[MOON]

Thank you so much!

[FJ Davis]

Gracefully articulated!
Truly lovely poetry, Moon.

[MOON]

Many thanks
Take care!

[Antonio Valentino]

"You cleansed wounds and disinfected my pain"

it sure seems that way sometimes ill tell ya..


"In me all the golden dreams I sought in you
In homage captured heart you altered my view"

and that right there is so much what we're all doing here at this special place and others like it..

sharing, and caring, in hopes that we all grow happier and wiser together..

wondie full Moon

you shine ever, our darkest nights..

:)

[MOON]

Thanks Antonio what a beautiful review!

[Antonio Valentino]

you're very welcome sweet friend, the pleasure was all mine..

[Nick.B]

Such an emotional and interesting poem, meeting the right person can change the color of the day...great poem

[MOON]

Thank you so much
Take care!

[Southern Cross]

How wonderful to read of such strong emotions and yet tender love and unyielding support. Glad you have connected with that love and the strength it emotes.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the rhyme got to me too..but then i am not such a rhyme fan.

but there is awfully strong sentiment in this...lucky person this is about...and the speaker seems also to benefit greatly from this love.

[MOON]

Thanks for the lovely review.

[Emerald Seas]

This is... wow! I don't know why it hit me so, but gave me a pause and a tear. Smiling now, maybe a memory grabbed me with this and pushed out for a second. Touched me deeply - lovely writing Moon.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

a powerful love this is you have written of.......lovely!

[MOON]

Thanks Neva

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

I really like the content of this piece, but somehow the rhyming AA BB just drives my ears crazy, ever write more A B A B?

The 1st and last stanza in particular stood out for me.

[MOON]

Thanks Kevin ? I am a work in progress , only thing I know is rhyme so I do it ad nauseam. Will try out your suggestion ! I tried poetry without rhyme , failed dismally. Thanks

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

Oh I've seen you not fail without rhyme, I'm not sure what you are talking about :)