Shades of Grey

Shades of Grey

A Poem by MOON

 

There is no other just you and I

Living with me you thought you would die

A stone at hand and a reason why

Burning in me liberations sigh

 

A flame of a township in my heart

There is a stage and I have my part

All my shed tears now a work of art

Here is the new dawn here is its start

 

Nail all my hopes and dreams to a mast

Tell me freedoms song is iron cast

Forget bloody wounds it cannot last

Cold memory a train flashing past

 

Hear the pain filled drumbeat in the night

Swallow bitter pills of black and white

© 2012 MOON


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i must say i am left wanting more. i was being sucked up and then your tornado violently threw me to the ground. SPLAT! story of my life.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very good, I love it!!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Mia
This is so amazing! WOW! Mind blowing.
"All my shed tears now a work of art"
That is such an intense line. It literally made my heart beat faster.
"Swallow bitter pills of black and white"
Very clever line. Both people are bitter and how can you move forward without letting go of the bitterness. I'm not saying forget, no! Never forget...remembering is the key to ensuring it never happens again. But letting go, the past is the past and try as we may...we can never change it. The rainbow nation...HA...what a joke! Until we are fully honest about the baggage this country has all we'll be is a country that confuses community with co-existence.
If you have time read a blog entry I posted.
http://mia-dontbeafraidtohateonme.blogspot.com/2012/08/its-black-its-white-its-racism.html

Posted 12 Years Ago


Love love love it! Thank you for sharing!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow, Moon, this is a well thought out write, with beautiful insight line by line:
"Nail all my hopes and dreams to a mast" that means for me much, as I interpret it as reaching further than a point you're in right now... you want to be further... grow above pain, and in your last stanza you explain it excellent.
A very good write!


E.L.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Ah you did it once again. The ending truly sells it all

Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow, really like this. Lovely flow and yet, to the point. I have some competition in the rhyming department!!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Beautiful piece! Effortless flow and wonderfully voiced...this was a pleasure to read hon...
Thought provoking
xo

Posted 12 Years Ago


Good use of rhyme that didn't interupt the flow as many do, what would poets do without love, good or bad......well constructed poem :O)

Posted 12 Years Ago


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12 Years Ago

This is really amazing.....I was once in crazy love with a girl from a township.......in the end she.. read more
I really appreciate your style.. you can tell that you consider the flow, the purpose, and your vocabulary to be very important to what you're trying to convey, it creates an atmosphere, this is very grey, indeed, a great title.. I liked this because it seems to come naturally to you, you have talent! Keep writing!

Posted 12 Years Ago



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