Shades of Grey

 

There is no other just you and I

Living with me you thought you would die

A stone at hand and a reason why

Burning in me liberations sigh

 

A flame of a township in my heart

There is a stage and I have my part

All my shed tears now a work of art

Here is the new dawn here is its start

 

Nail all my hopes and dreams to a mast

Tell me freedoms song is iron cast

Forget bloody wounds it cannot last

Cold memory a train flashing past

 

Hear the pain filled drumbeat in the night

Swallow bitter pills of black and white

Reviews

[Southern Cross]

Love and adore your open soul..Bleeding or ecstatic it's always a pleasure to be there and witness.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

"Hear the pain filled drumbeat in the night
Swallow bitter pills of black and white"~ The bitter pills of life (love) can be swallowed but not forgotten... to incoporate the shades of grey is forgiving...

A heartfelt write!

[Jo March]

very well written and smooth

[SHEEMA HUQ]

lovely musical writing

[Eve]

All of life seems a stage to me now, all persons the actors and life a tragic play alternating with comedy relief, sometimes we have to except what we can not change, kiss them tenderly and send them out into the world...doesn't mean we won't cry over it, tears just mean we cared enough to heal.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"all my shed tears now a work of art"

like that line so much.

not my style, this poem, but i can see why others appreciate the form so much...you do very well with it.

life is shades of grey, not black and white, but some fail to see that.


jacob

[Tree]

Painful, powerful piece. A small window to the soul you've opened. And like the traditional format you use here, gives this piece its tone.. Well done Moon.

[Zainab UF]

Now this 'shades of grey' is what everyone should be talking about!

[FJ Davis]

High-end stuff!
Truly excellent poetry, Moon.

[Belle]

This is beyond traditional.
The form is like of a Shakespearean Sonnet with three quatrain followed by a couplet, but it did not follow the traditional Iambic Pentameter rhythmic count and ABAB CDCD EFEF GG rhyming scheme. A daring experiment in term of form, I can say. As for the language, word choice is brilliant and you really put it all together in a very effective manner.Well, the reason I like the diction of the whole piece very much. Title is attention driver, all of us in any way in our life we have this shade of gray. I can relate with your choice of the shade black and white. It is like for me a matter of answering YES or NO, basically if the state of the mind is in between--then it is with the shade of gray.

This is poetry Moon. Brilliant.