Darling

Darling

A Poem by MOON

Colours blend take on a different hue

Standing on a hill with a jaundiced view

I remember you were like morning dew

A dancer on stage an actor on cue

Tossing of a coin all shiny and new

A graceful eagle wingspan as it flew

 

So why was it that my love never grew

Darling I knew, you too good to be true

 

© 2012 MOON


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The last two Lines sounded like the couplet of a Sonnet.
Too good rhyming scheme also, it made the piece more
attention drawer. Excellent piece, it is Moon!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Herein lies the honesty of a poet, one who sees the beauty and wonder, though realizes the tainted reality of the world... Brilliant form and wisely moving twist to keep us on our toes!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Beautiful, and honest, I feel SA here. through your words, it is amazing how you still honor this beautiful person, and are full of love, while wondering the same time, a gentle smooth, and excellent piece of work Moon, shine shine :)

E. L.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Nice poem, good work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


The little voice inside new there was something wrong. I think we all have it, though some choose to ignore it as over reacting. When it's too good to be true...

Nice rhyming and a good take on an old story.

Posted 12 Years Ago


No small feat to have all the lines rhyme and do it well! That second line grabbed my interest right away and contrasted so well with what followed in the stanza. All was explained in your ending lines and all too often....well, it's true.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Nice poem Moon and very different.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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A distrust of something you obviously enjoyed but didn't believe in or really feel? I have enjoyed many I didn't trust, but still enjoyed for a while. Another wonderful portrait of your amazing pen :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


People are afraid sometimes of the perfect love, because at heart, maybe they don't feel they deserve it. It's weird but I can see how this could happen.

Posted 12 Years Ago


That last line indicates that it may have been you who were untrue.
Soaringly lovely poem; clouded or, perhaps enhanced, by obscurity.
Amazing offering!

Posted 12 Years Ago



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