The clock tower

This one's for having no choice in something to come, and to just have to wait till it happens

The man sits up on the tower,

Watching time pass by,

Ever dreading the fateful hour,

That he will surely die.

 

As he sits, upon the hand,

Too soon to bring his demise.

He tries again to make a plan,

Despite all the ones he tries.

 

Tick, Tock, Tick, Tock,

The time keeps going past.

Tick, Tock, Tick, Tock,

No longer will he last.

 

He cannot find another way,

He readies for his fate,

Upon the ground he soon will lay,

The ambulance too late.

 

5 minutes later,

The hand moves more,

His fear is greater,

Than ever before.

 

He knows he is done.

He knows he will fall.

There’s no where to run.

No rescue to call.

 

There are things he can try,

While he sits there and waits.

But they all can’t deny,

His unfortunate fate.

 

As he sits on the hand,

Of the old clock tower,

He waits for his planned,

And so deadly hour.

 

The hands almost there,

As he holds on real tight,

For he’ll fall through the air,

At twelve o’clock tonight.

 

 

Seconds left, the time moves on,

He says his last goodbyes,

The life he had, is to be gone,

On the hour that he dies.

 

Tick, Tock, Tick, Tock,

The time keeps going past.

Tick, Tock, Tick, Tock,

No longer will he last.

 

The seconds race, His fingers slip,

He’s slipping from the clock.

The struck twelve, he loses grip,

Tick Tock, Tick Tock, Tick Tock.

Reviews

[Mockingbird]

this was very suspenseful...you could almost hear the ticking of the clock...very hitchcock. it also lets us get into the mind of the jumper in the few minutes that he has left. he is full of despair but for a second you think he might have second thoughts. great poem.

[Poetry in Motion]

Nice imagery and flow. Like the way that the time seems to get faster and more urgent as you read. Great work!

[Natalie]

Nice job.

[Tony]

like the onomatopoeia here--
the sense of impending doom works well with the clock hand imagery. Nice job.

Makosica

[Lilly]

A captivating poem - I think the use of rhyme is very effective here

[Bubo]

Accurately described the passing of time, one thing we have so little control over...........great images portrayed.

[amanda gott]

i really liked this, i wanted to keep reading to see what happened. it kept me intrigued with out and the rhyme was wonderful

[Liz]

Love it. Nicely done.

[kij143]

nicely done, it's something everyone can relate to, the mood was fabuously shown...keep writing(:
~Kij

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I liked this. I agree with the comment below me. I couldn't stop reading either. Very exciting piece. Thanks for sharing. :)