Monster

It's a metaphor for two people in my life. One who causes all these problems and the other trying to give reason to what they did, acting like "The problems weren't there

I pull the sheets atop my head.

Don't wan't to see what waits outside.

I know the monster's under my bed.

And so I sit and wait and hide.

 

They don't exist, my daddy says.

It's all from in my head.

I don't know where my daddy is,

But my head's above the bed.

 

If it's above, then what is under?

Just another pile of clothes?

With all this noise it makes me wonder,

Will they eat me if I doze?

 

I know it's there, under me.

With it's evil beady eyes.

Don't deny me on what I see,

Don't tell me happy lies.

 

"WHERE'S DADDY!?," I cry

At the top of my lungs

As I hear the house sigh,

And the licking of tongues.

 

"Daddy, where are you?"

"Daddy, I'm scared!"

"DADDY WON'T SAVE YOU"

"DADDY NEVER CARED"

 

"Shut up! Don't say that!"

"Daddy does care!"

"THEN BOY, WHERE'S HE AT?"

"WHERE, LITTLE BOY, WHERE?"

 

 

"STOP IT, GO AWAY!"

"Why won't you LEAVE?"

"CAUSE I'M HERE TO STAY"

"TO CAUSE YOU TO GRIEVE!"

 

In comes my dad,

Sleepy as can be.

Boy am I glad,

He's here for me.

 

He asks what is wrong,

As he looks under the bed.

He's done this so long,

He knows where it's led.

 

"I heard it, It spoke!"

I tried to explain.

"Enough with this joke"

He said once again.

 

"Monsters don't exist,

They're all in your head"

We both smiled and kissed,

But I doubt what he said.

 

As I heard the door close,

I pulled up the sheets more.

I know how the rest goes,

And I expected the roar.

 

The thing Below laughed at me.

It laughed at me and said

"YOU BETTER GET USED TO ME,

WE'VE GOT ANOTHER NIGHT AHEAD"

Reviews

[Ailee Way]

"As I hear the house sigh"

"YOU BETTER GET USED TO ME,
WE'VE GOT ANOTHER NIGHT AHEAD"

you got some great lines in this piece. wow. it's funny- i just posted a poem maybe last week about the figures that i used to see in my room at night (while i was dreaming) and now i keep running into more poems that are similar. thinking about it really scares the shiznit outta me. you sum it up perfectly in your last lines. great. real scary. i also could see this as a deeper, multi-layered metaphor for general fear in life and fighting the demons in our heads. it's all so true. thanks for posting.

[The Violent Wolf]

wow. i like it. monsters in your head...

[qaralynn]

love it..you really have talent!

[Avery Ash]

haha, i like this one.
i like the last two lines.
the monster in your head seems pretty real, though.
amazing, as usual. =]
-♥-
Aveyr

[KAREN BROWN]

great write, very true when were younger and even being a adult we have bad dreams and thoughts.I was always told dreams mean something if your insure about something it can make you have dreams. sometimes it could be a movie you watched that night that scared you and when you sleep your subconcious you dream that but in different ways.I really enjoyed it a lot. thanks for sharing this karen

[Cassandra]

Loving it. Once again that childish setting.. is written so brilliantly. Once again is that rhyme that fun bouncy rhyme and yet once again you aren't talking about something fun. I like that the dad tries to always help his son from the monsters and still they come... definitely.

I thought you cleverly told a simple story we've heard over and over and put a twist on it. Monsters taunting

"DADDY WON'T SAVE YOU"

"DADDY NEVER CARED" ... a child's biggest fear.
I must say I quite enjoy your writing. Do keep it up.

[None]

You better get yourself a night light! haha
The whole thing describes the feelings of being afraid of the dark so very well. I like how your dad shows up here. I like how you try to talk yourself out of the fear...
"If it's above, then what is under?
Just another pile of clothes?
With all this noise it makes me wonder,
Will they eat me if I doze? "
---I really like the part about the noise. LOL. You start hearing things and imagination plays tricks.

You should enter this in the "Phobia "contest going on right now! Fantastic write!

[R J Askew]

Childish yet not very wise. Fear, but fear of what? And where is daddy is a question millions of deserted children must now ask, or who is daddy? Ach, sad. But I latched onto the line 'Monsters don't exist they are all in your head'...this line of reassurance is also so true for many people whose monsters really are all in their head...so many people. Again I think this would be a great performance poem. It has a simplicity and economy about it that should make it slide into an audience's psyche with artful ease.

[Tania Leigh]

This is truly creepy, and one many of us can relate to!

Excellent write!

[Brette Medb]

Creepy... it reminded me of the beginning of Nightmare Before Christmas with the red beady eyes lol... The rhyme and the flow were perfect... great write.


Brette

[Legion]

Spooked. I find yelling at them effective. :) Good read here.