Emotions (2004)

Love
Like chains
en-captures me
to make me
slave

 

Hate
like fire
motivates me
and makes me
fight

 

Emptiness
like void
handicaps me
to give me
rest

 

Cruelty
like death
turns of emotions
to make me
B***h

 

Kindness
like rain
hinders me
to make me
Gone

And so
Where do I turn
What do I become
- BALANCE -

Reviews

[TheFemininePad]

This poem makes absolutely no sense to the title of the poem. This is actually a pretty horrible poem as well. I would definitely rewrite a lot of this poem. The structure isn't bad if you could establish a better rhyme though out. I would search within you for your most powerful emotions, and write about poetry that is fueled by your own personal experiences. Try writing your poems in a notebook, and rework them until they seem great. They publish them on here. Also I would work on the grammar on your poem as well.