You could say

You could say that most people think that when you die that your adventure is over. I say no the adventure only takes an unexpected turn. Wether for the better or worse is completely up to your attitude. I enjoy the adventure of death. That is what this story is about my fight to the other side. A better place where adventure can happen everyday. It all began with my death. Thats right i wasn't always dead. I once was a very handsome guy. Brown hair and sparkling brown eyes. I was respected and well known i was friends with everyone. There was only girl that I said I love you to. Her name was Valerie. She was beautiful. Brown hair, silvery blue eyes, very nice body. Nice, good sense of humor. We planned out our entire life. Down to the names of our children. Life seemed to be going perfect until we went for a walk down a dark road. I was kidnapped. They took me to a place hidden in the woods and used me as a bargaining chip. My parents kept their promise but the kidnappers did no such thing. Right when they got their money one of them had pulled a gun. Right in front of my parents and my girlfriend i was executed. My life was taken and never given back. When I died i could see everything. I explored the world. I saw the amazing pyramids of Egypt. I climbed the stairs of the Aztec Temples. I ran with the lions, i flew with the eagles, i swam with the dolphins. My afterlife was going good. Although I learned that just because your life seems perfect doesn't mean that the unexpected couldn't happen. When I died I watched my girlfriend everyday. She had tried so hard to commit suicide because she wanted to be with me and every time i made sure she failed. Life is to short to waste on a love that will not happen. I left messages and every thing to help her. When i finally knew that she wouldn't try again i left. I knew it was time for me to go into the light. Finally something that seemed easy even for me. So I walked.

Reviews

[Katie]

Well aside from a few grammar mistakes this is a very interesting story. I kind of wish you had dragged out the story before his death, told us more about his family and girlfriend, or maybe even about his last few minutes, you made it all sound so interesting. But I am definitely interested in where you are going with this. I look forward to reading more and seeing where you go with this. Great Job.

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

couldnt stop reading!!!! i hope youre going to write more??????????????????

[Jules]

hmmm im not sure... its different. in a good way i think im intrigued about what happens next. does anything happen next?! lol