last letter

for nearest one

feeling irritating,

because all faces are glomy

culprit is i

so i have to leave 

i can't express but 

jimmy was my nearest 

her leaving 

force me to leave

after four month

when i came back

i can't but went her room

to get back my memoirs 

i decide to meet her 

when i feeling her absence 

i found a open letter there

which was written a month ago for me

i tried to communicate with her to meet

but a shock hold me back of her death 

i was thundered 

just thundered 

i opened her letter 

and found to tear

" my heart want to see you with great eager" 

nothing else...........

Author's Note

it's my emotion

Reviews

[Just Kim]

sad piece but very well written

[de_maruf]

thanks

[marie]

this is such a lovely composed piece, so sad, and lost..

[de_maruf]

really?

[marie]

yes!:) you have done amazing in this:)

[de_maruf]

pleased

[marie]

:)

[de_maruf]

:)

[Lady of the Lake]

I actually really liked this poem, so all I really have to say is keep at it :)

[Francis Danger]

the wording choice might seem strange, ie feeling irritating instead of irritated, i think in this case it actually works. i wouldn't change it here, because it comes across as emotional, and true emotion is very rarely perfect or formulaic. so, very beautiful effort.

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

I notice the wrong usage of tenses at the start but...

You never fail to interest this reader of yours~

Your message is incredibly clear and perhaps I've grown accustomed to this writing style of yours that's very unique and easy-to-read.

Personally, I like reading your poems for basic reasons: 1. It's easy to read 2. Your message is undeniably clear

So I applaud you, please continue with your work.

[RachelReaper]

its a very powerful emotion. Very sad

[Euro]

This is a sad poem but with very strong emotions
-Penelope H.

[de_maruf]

thanks for read

[Dayran]

An old friend returns with news.

[de_maruf]

not just that

[Dayran]

Of course!

[khalid]

nicely penned

[C.R.Turner]

This is really sad. :(