my breath

my breath

A Poem by de_maruf
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writing so many days later, nothing to say about it, it is alike my other writings

"
when i sleep, dream come
when i dream, you come 
but when you come in my memory 
i can't, i can't sleep

when clouds float, i see it
when it rain, i get wet
but i feel pain, because
i miss, miss your presence

when i close my eyes, i see you
when i open it, i want to see you
you are my breath, i can't stop it
so indeed i need you.

© 2012 de_maruf


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de_maruf
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Perhaps you think this is like your other writings but I suggest that they are all different. Unless the words are exactly alike, in exactly the same order then no; it is not the same as your other work. This is a purple-tinged logistic penrose - a diagram of the heart's desire expressed as a fundamental law of nature and an autonomic function of the spirit, "...you are my breath, i can't stop it so indeed i need you" The fruit falls from the tree and strikes the ground but never in the same place or the same way twice; yet always with a thud of absolute certainty that it has followed its nature. As you have here in this poem. A laurel for your effort de_maruf.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

de_maruf

11 Years Ago

thanks for the fantastic analysis



Reviews

Oh the love that i feel in this poem, I love it, well written ^_^

Posted 7 Years Ago


A poem that describes what it is like to be in love and loose it well done

Posted 11 Years Ago


good? no. Great? Definitely! Great job!!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Great one...... The short lines are real piercing.... Its raw and beautiful

Posted 11 Years Ago


What a lovely poem! You're really good at expressing emotions through poetry :)
Keep up the good work! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


very well done this was very nice very expressive of love and the desire to see that person agsin

Posted 11 Years Ago


I have felt that longing and know this pain. Well expressed my friend.

Posted 11 Years Ago


de_maruf

11 Years Ago

thanks
Good one de_maruf the lines are pretty good and raw

Posted 11 Years Ago


Perhaps you think this is like your other writings but I suggest that they are all different. Unless the words are exactly alike, in exactly the same order then no; it is not the same as your other work. This is a purple-tinged logistic penrose - a diagram of the heart's desire expressed as a fundamental law of nature and an autonomic function of the spirit, "...you are my breath, i can't stop it so indeed i need you" The fruit falls from the tree and strikes the ground but never in the same place or the same way twice; yet always with a thud of absolute certainty that it has followed its nature. As you have here in this poem. A laurel for your effort de_maruf.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

de_maruf

11 Years Ago

thanks for the fantastic analysis
it's beautifuly peaceful. i love it, it's so adorale, and the way you put the words was amazin, well done :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


de_maruf

11 Years Ago

thanks

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