grieving

grieving

A Poem by de_maruf
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just randomly written

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mirror tell my passion
 nature inspire me
air whisper my sadness
cloudy sky grieve for me  
 but why?
am i depressed?????????????

© 2012 de_maruf


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de_maruf
just randomly written

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I like your description. Good use of words allow the the reader to feel the emotion and have a good vision. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


de_maruf

12 Years Ago

thank you very much
I like how the poem tracks, and your use of font to build up to the 'cloudy sky grieve for me' Then you almost whisper the last line.
Liked it ;)

Posted 12 Years Ago


You can reduce the question marks and the colors don't at all seem appropriate for the poem but I like the thought. Your simple lines seem so deep and nice

Keep writing

Posted 12 Years Ago


I really like this, a lot. The colors are distracting and the excessive '???' question marks tend to take the meaning off a bit for me. But you do have something very nice here.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow, now there's a possibility the answer to the question is, "Yes." Oh, by the way, the colors are distracting. But perhaps that's just me. However the different SIZE fonts on the different lines do seem to show a certain boldness or timidity. What do you think the color and font size add to the overall message (for you)? Otherwise, for me, it is succinct and to the point. Oh, and perhaps a few less question marks? Don't know for sure... just saying. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very nicely done.Understandable and relatable emotions.Thanks for sharing (:

Posted 12 Years Ago


de_maruf

12 Years Ago

thanks for reading
 Soul Fire

12 Years Ago


you're welcome
made me smile...Is that right? I loved the last line

Posted 12 Years Ago


short sad but nice..

Posted 12 Years Ago


nice expression...doesn't appear at all random

Posted 12 Years Ago


de_maruf

12 Years Ago

thanks
mirror, tell my passion-is it that you are in conversation with the mirror?
or
mirror tell my passion-is that you are telling us the mirror reflects your passion-because then tell should be replaced but tells.
So that is where I got confused; apart from that well connected lines clearly stating your state of mind.nice!

Posted 12 Years Ago


de_maruf

12 Years Ago

what mirror say obviously i do
thanks for read it

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dhaka, south, Bangladesh



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