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A Poem by de_maruf
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it will my word when she will comeback

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from many days
i am waiting
waiting for you
you promised me
promised me to come
but when you come
it's too late
for the emotion
and time is no more.

© 2012 de_maruf


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de_maruf
yeah, it will be.....

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Hmm.. I can infer what you mean in this poem but I'm not sure if it's all too clear. You can work on that.

But overall it's nice

Posted 12 Years Ago


Sometime heart will give up and close the door to a old love. Nice flow of thoughts and I like the strong ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
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Posted 12 Years Ago


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Very introspective.

Posted 12 Years Ago


anxious and impatient

Posted 12 Years Ago


OK, this is better than the others. Makes more sense. I do have a question about, "but when you come" ... is there a problem with the 'tense' (past versus present) or did you mean for it to have a colloquial/sexual representation? I can't determine that; if that's even in the ball park of what you meant to convey. But, the best so far (I'm reading them in order).

Posted 12 Years Ago


de_maruf

12 Years Ago

no,
there is no sexual representation here

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dhaka, south, Bangladesh



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