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A Poem by de_maruf
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There are some times when all things get present but you couldn't be happy

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Over the sky there was a moon,
floating autumn cloud floating here to there,
with there color of colorless white bird,
cool breeze swiping my here,
gentle breathe freshening my soul,
dimed moon brightening the night,
all things were there for me,
but, put me in dark,
get my soul with you,you left.

© 2012 de_maruf


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few mistakes spelling wise, but other than that it was a nice short poem, it seemed to flow nicely and had a lot of imagery and descriptions nature wise

Posted 12 Years Ago


Breaking up the poem make it easier to read. A lot of emotion in the poem. Pain teaches us to appreciate pleasure and good time. A sad ending to a very good poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Really sad poem! I really feel bad for you! hope you'll find someone else, more worthy of your love! :-)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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de_maruf
de_maruf

dhaka, south, Bangladesh



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