Society

A view on society and how humans prey on humans for sport, often resulting in cruel or self-destructive qualities developing as part your personality. I quickly drew the icon.

Society

Society breaks me into pieces
And I go mad with "the abstract"
Ignorance is bliss
So they feign intelligence and wisdom
Fake love, Fake hate, Fake lies, Fake truths, Fake reality, Fake happiness
We are a town of deception and blindfold wearers
The empty expressions with a smiling mask to hide behind
A fake serum of crimson hue runs through me
They wash their brains clean
And rid themselves of anything real
Blanched reality breeds convenience
What's a lie for me
Is a truth to them
They pick off pieces of me and flick them away
My heart eaten by societies cannibals
Tossed around for your enjoyment.

You laugh at me, not with me!
Yet I get caught in the web
And convince myself to laugh
Even as you pick me apart
And gorge on me, spitting out the marrow
I laugh at myself
I laugh at the stupidity of it all
And the easily avoided death
I laugh at mans self destructing tendency
I laugh with them, for behind the mask they are afraid
They are like me, all actors in a play
No one knows who wrote it or gave us the props
So we pretend to know
And fill our heads with lies
And as such it shall be known
Lies. Truth. Happiness.

Author's Note

Like the icon? won make much sense unless you read Japanese.... but hey! I drew it so... ya know... (even though it was really fast 0-0)Interpretation? thought? Criticism?

Reviews

[Persona]

I appreciate the drawing. I like that you're trying to comment upon society but the poem feels a bit rushed and rambles. It could be edited to be shorter and 'tighter' to sound like you have a good idea of what you disapprove of in society. It reads like you generally dislike society but what specifically? Maybe you could start the poem with 'We hide behind blindfolds, unable to see...' and maybe delete the lines before that? For me the blindfolds bit is what drew me in.

[MADAM]

Ya I agree xD but I generally just write and post, I usually do my poetry in the heat of te moment, this one specifically.... And it's an open book, so you can fill in whatever you want really, though I had hypocrites in mind when I wrote this (which was a long time ago actually...)

[FateDictates]

"They pick off pieces of me and flick them away"
I love this line, great work, hitting the nail on the head re; subject..

[Saddam]

Society breaks me into pieces
And I go mad with "the abstract"
Ignorance is bliss
So they feign intelligence and wisdom
Fake love, Fake hate, Fake lies, Fake truths,
Fake reality, Fake happiness...

A real thought on society. Great poem you have made. I like it much.