Was eve?

Was eve?

A Story by MADAM
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The story of eve in a different light. What happened when she actually bit the apple?

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Was eve?

And the poison surged through her body, pumping sludge through her thin veins.

Irrefutable.

A irreversible sin.

The fruit rolled out of her hands.

How stupidly humanity died.
So young.
So innocent.

The blood couldn't be contained and it poured out like an ivy wrapping around her body.
Intertwining and connecting randomly.

The black blood spewed from every crevice.

What a costly mistake...

All because she wanted to taste the sweet before the bitter.
Immortality was a lie.
It died along with the innocence of the world.

The creatures looked on with blank stares.

The world went on.
The death of us, mean nothing to them.

God himself turned away.

If my maker didn't love me, then who would?
A castaway who tasted the bitter, but never the sweet.

Of she went, the omnipotent human with no sense of "humanity"

The filthy human blood pumped through her heart.
It's no wonder were so vengeful and heartless.

© 2014 MADAM


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Fresh approach of the subject, the apple could be seen as a symbol on a woman's body that is off limits to men, and women must never let men taste that part of their body or they could get confused and start looking at their same gender, that could be the intended message in the original story.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MADAM

10 Years Ago

I actually would have never thought of that! Very nice interpretation though! I like it a lot!x3



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Fresh approach of the subject, the apple could be seen as a symbol on a woman's body that is off limits to men, and women must never let men taste that part of their body or they could get confused and start looking at their same gender, that could be the intended message in the original story.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MADAM

10 Years Ago

I actually would have never thought of that! Very nice interpretation though! I like it a lot!x3

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Added on January 26, 2014
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Tags: Was, eve, apple, forbidden, fruit, bitter, sweet

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I love to write poems and create elaborate stories, I also draw art on deviant^^) I am currently making one of my stories into a manga:3 I am very passionate about my ideas, but I'm open to opinions a.. more..

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