Illusion of freedom p.1, (day1)

Illusion of freedom p.1, (day1)

A Poem by M.D
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sharing my weekdays of mental idleness and trying to understand myself be free to tear this piece apart

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This city is asleep, weeps of rain and anguish
Thoughts-parasites gorge my brains and languish

 

Her scents are around - whirl me till i'm lost
But they won't quench my thirst - only make it worse

I am silent, as unrecorded hollow disc
After all, said "no" independent moral risk

I alas has failed, too late to yell - will melt!
there is recipe for killing senses - consensus

I thought I'm out of scorching heat, not out of glass
But you said love leapt, not arouse

This case can't be fixed by lifelike lessons
As thou on the land, I drown in weekdays and verses

© 2011 M.D


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Theres some really good stuff here, i think myself it needs to be tied up together better

Posted 12 Years Ago


Last lines are true.
"This case can't be fixed by lifelike lessons
As thou on the land, I drown in weekdays and verses"
I like this short poem. Some lesson in the words. Thank you for the amazing poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


Cool images...good poem

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is brilliant work. Interesting message as well.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Offbeat, yet purely stirring. An nice break from the usual.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Clever abstact writing...
captures the inner thoughts and tumult
brilliantly
Well done :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Abstract but genius. ^^* I appreciate writes such as this one.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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M.D

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