Cracked Abyss

We all have struggles through life. If you aren't in a storm... you need to prepare for one. I wrote this after crying my eyes out for my brother's monkey.

Moisten your lips in preparation of what is here…
I called you and you came
 leaving a wife
Kids, hope, strength…dreams
As you saw the images coming into view
Everything you believed in and that believed in you
You just sat them on the shore
Taking that step to the oceans floor…
The abyss.
  What was gone now awaits your welcoming kiss
 once hidden by the one that left you desolate and vile
Only
 now returning and bestowing
 you with seven times the supremacy, and domination
 over your mere existence as before
you folded, and the pipe reigns
no resistance like a worn rubber band
You stood up and showed the fallen one your hand
Take me in deep…
Finally you will peacefully sleep
Trust in me ...let me own your soul
Pay me forever with your life’s toll
Yes you are mine now to destroy
Feel me rise into darkness from lost joy
Love me!
The wanted ruler of your tomorrows
Look into my eyes and not see your Mother’s sorrow
I owe you nothing from my empty promises of pain and suffering
But I rape you of everything
Because you looked back into my eyes
I char your mind with my images and demise
Unaware of my plan to raze many,
 I sought you for my tyranny.
I thank you with the lives ruined by my touch
Through you
…Because you had so much.



 

Reviews

[☮]

This is definitely a brave write. You are talking from the other side and expressing how evil thinks. You've personified temptation in its most hellish form and communicated its only intentions, which are to divide, conquer and possess.

Let your poem be a reminder to believers every day. Beware the abyss.
Outsanding piece. Favorite.

[Unspoken poet]

so very awesome, I totally love this write

[C. R. Stone]

Strong emotions. Very expressive, plausible and to the point! Thanks for sharing.

[No Longer Writing Here]

Powerful write with a strong message. One of the things I love about this poem is that it isn't overrun with unnecessary wording...straight and to the point...great job.

[Ravenskald]

almost tragic
a romeo and juliet moment
beautiful
cyntax as ever (lost friend) makes good points beware the abyss
hence "abandon all hope ye who enter here ... ,where angels fear to tread "
The abyss is no place for folly, pride, lust she will suck your soul dry and spit you out
abandon all hope
in the abyss the only thing that survives
is faith

Raven

[Deadofnight]

wow girl I don't have a lot of fancy words to say but I like the feeling of this.

[Flow~]

The really sad part is that if crack wasn't enough we are now hammered with Myth which is even more destructive and preferred over crack. This is a wonderful write because it is speaking the truth. Too many souls are lost to this drug but it isn't as powerful as so many think it is, and it can be defeated like most things in life it has a beginning and an end. Great write.

[Alice Oiseau]

A breathtaking shift in tone! I applaud you.
Very powerful, very dark.
Favorite line: The wanted ruler of your tomorrows.
One hell of a powerful line you have there and overall a fantastic poem.

Cheers.

[Crazy Cat Man]

reminds me of 50 Cent's song "A Baltimore Love Thing" i feel like anyone of us can easily fall into addiction if we just let our inhibitions take control. great piece

[Gheeneil]

You made great dark images. The flow of words is like the enraged waves of the ocean which are in search for a lost soul for a victim. So powerful!

[Dionysus Cain]

this is a very good write to me. it moves along well, but i like the way you use the meaning and expression in the words rather than the words themselves. when looking into a abyss ,it look right back at you.