questions in his mind

 

 

I lay here thinking of your questions, and thoughts

how could You not know of what...

would it be like

for me looking at flowers on the streets of New York

at the one of many open store fronts

crowded in enjoyment

sipping my favorite morning java

being carried away in steamy thoughts of you

Waiting, my love for you to find me

openly...

Destined for promise

you Walking with the crowd

but the nearing

of my presence slows your pace

questioning... the energy that turns and moves you with a

feeling-seen in your eyes, knowing that you will soon see my face

only being lead by a dream that holds my spirit

you are lead off course to touch

Running toward the unknown, but welcoming warmth

...solace,

that confuses your mind

like a gust of wind from out of nowhere

she has to be here

you have daydreamed the fragrance from my neck

after gently pushing my hair aside

Yes, you smell me in my mind

intensity of happenstance

lets you know

It's me

wearing that hat...almost not breathing anymore,

making everything a blur, you

run and put your arms

around my waist without ever seeing my face

and taste my neck with a kiss...I know it is you because

our hearts begin to beat rhythmically,

and like a great crescendo... start to pound like kettle drums
 

One second feels like a life time, with you.

Kissing, and crying with an ocean floor of anticipation.
Hugs meshing souls with all
 

questions...

finally answered.

 

Reviews

[Arthur Henn]

Amazing!, Beautifully written and expressed in a manner of fine taste,
I should not say this here...lol
My favorite part of a woman is her neck...lol

you have daydreamed the fragrance from my neck
after gently pushing my hair aside
Yes, you smell me in my mind
intensity of happenstance
lets you know
It's me

This knocked me out of my chair.

Thank you for writing and sharing such a wonderful poem.

Art

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

Incredible! Very descriptive and visually passionate. I wish I had your dictionary of adjectives! Very passionate and innocently lustful.

"you have daydreamed the fragrance from my neck
after gently pushing my hair aside
Yes, you smell me in my mind
intensity of happenstance"

Flytactular! I'll be reading more of your stuff soon. And I wished you haddent(yeah I said "haddent") read the poem that you read of mine first! It gives the wrong impression of me! Talk to you soon....

[Jason]

Everything has been said about this piece so ill just say thanks.

[Nymphadora]

hi... nice poem from you... again.

[☮]

Amazing piece, LL. I'm happy I came across this. You have a knack for being able to transport the reader into another place and time in order to witness the actions that develop within your poems. The emotion within is explosive. Nice work as usual.

[Ankhesen Mié]

This was great because time and place are irrelevant. The emotion is the focus of the poem, and its shift in tense, location, and sometimes even pronoun is true to how we think and feel and fantasize (non-linear, I mean).

I also think there's a musical quality here; I think with a slight change in format you could easily change this into a song.

[BEEGE]

WOW!!

You have just reminded me why I love this place and need to find more time to visit with my people on this site. This was extremely good. Its like you get better with each line of each peice.
Well done youngn!

Beege

[Lady V]

Okay let me get my thoughts right.........................................

What a wonderful thing it is to be able to melt emotions onto paper and give sensations without anything but words. You are an amazing writer. I felt every word and was almost saddened to see it end. It is a great piece. I applaud you over and again.

Live, Love and Learn

Lady V

[Walkingblind]

The anticipation that I feel coming off this poem is amazing.
Something so normal is intensified by the longing for the one you belong with
I'm loving this right now because it has a mature feeling to it like Marvin said.
No ten year old with a little crush wrote this but a woman sure of herself
and what she wants. Awesome love the emotion!

[A LaDy NaMeD D]

You know something is good, if while your reading it you can feel it in your gut in your soul. And this did just that.

D

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

WOW......CAN I CATCH MY BREATH PLEASE? one of the best poems I have read today. at least one that has moved me the most.

our hearts begin to beat rhythmically,and like a great crescendo... start to pound like kettle drums
(EXCELLENT LINE. AND DESCRIPTION AND METAPHOR)

One second feels like a life time, with you. (i agree with you on this. you made memories float through my mind of this guy i really liked, wondering if he thought of me, fantasized etc about me. when i was with him every second felt like soemthing amazing. each word i lingered on in anticipation, hungering after his desire and needing him so badly. not necessarily on sexual either.)

i feel this poem was written in such class, and romance, and well....another great piece by you once again. you never fail to deliver.