PLAY FOR ME

 

I close my eyes
to absorb your whispers
that massage me gently
like a new found lyric
over, and over again
I take you inside
and out

of me
like a new way of breathing
you give me a life worthy of being
I am filled with riches
having no wants
because your love on me
anticipates my needs
silently. I wait to hear
you not only play
your music for me
but bestow your
presence in me
wrapping my soul
in a permanent
afterglow.

Reviews

[kollaboratyve]

Oh my my my!!!!!!!!! this is so good it really is tasteful. It put me in a daze for a minute. I did not know what emotion I was feeling. I tried to resist the lure, but as I read, I got hooked. This is really lovely. If you do not mind, I would like to highly consider featuring this on the Poets Consortium. I would love to examine this with the imput of the other members. This is really nice and graceful. You pulled out the heavy artillery on this one! Great piece,lovely!!!!

[APoetsMuse]

Wow this painted the perfect picture...such a great feeling. thanx

[Barbara Walker]

This is so gently flowing. I feel your contentment and I loved the last line-"wrapping my soul in a permanent afterglow". Well said! well written! Barbara - eyepoetress

[Barbara Walker]

Very nice and sensual! I think it would help the flow alot if you dropped the "on me" after the word love and the last sentence is a little wordy and awkward to read. Maybe just-I wait for you to play your music for me and bestow your presence in me...etc. It's a lovely poem! Barbara

[Jemelle Williams]

Reading this piece was honestly refreshing like a glass of aqua on a island's sunny day!
Quality not Quantity comes to mind, I admire your meaningful subtleness through lyricks...

[Shondell]

very good...ur words made me invision a strong love

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

HAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAYYYYYYYY!!!!!!!!!!! Very nice write! You always make sex sound so classy and beautiful. I envy you that somewhat. Great description ONCE AGAIN and I your poetry always feels like Spring time. I love your s**t L!

[R J Askew]

Superbly sensual and full of the drama and gentleness of love given and taken. Really like 'absorb your whispers' ... so much more to love than the physical. And '...a new way of breathing' speaks of ecsatasy, of being taken to a new place. 'I am filled with riches' is also a lovely line...who would not wish to feel like that? The poem is very sexy, but has absolutely none of the harsh language and imagery that a lot of erotic writing resorts to. You make the act of love a thing of beauty, which must, I think, mean that a higher level is reached. Not a bad place to be! Who could not approve of that? I know I do. Also, also... there is a nice internal rhyme going on towards the end of the poem with .... Oonly//bestoow//sooul//gloow ... The oo sound is just right. Thanks for pointing me to this one, which is entirely in keeping with the idea of lyrical love! Enjoyed very much. Also... approve very much of your notion in the comment line on giving and taking. Perfect.

[Onyx Sky]

permanent afterglow.... i love that line. :) I love this poem. :)
Ur writing is beautiful
hugs and writes.
kan

[verano]

This a beautifully written free verse. You choose your words and images well, and the words simply flow effortlessly, and indeed, gracefully from beginning to end. The poem is both sensuous and romantic. Very nicely done.

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

This poem first appears as a love poem, but in truth it is love relationship with the Savior.


I close my eyes
to absorb your whispers
that massage me gently
like a new found lyric
over, and over again
I take you inside
and out
of me


Do we as Christians weave in and out of sin and return to the Lord, hearing His still small voice whispering to us


And this part


like a new way of breathing
you give me a life worth inhaling
I am filled with riches
having no wants


God antisipates our every need and knows them long before we know them ourselves. A new way of breathing is breathing in the Lord right into our souls.



And finally the ending

wrapping my soul
in a permanent
afterglow.


The permanent afterglow of God's Love. Isn't that how we feel when we call upon the Lord to be saved.

Amazing piece, I know that God is smiling right now.

Good Job!