Here or There

when there is disconnect of the hearts, and the mind wanders

 ~ Here or there~

 

 

 

Is it real when you… can

Find …Love over there,

When you are supposed to be …here

…Is it real when you find your…mind

creeping…

When you should be sleeping…here

Is it for you when you can find passion

There,

…when you lost it here,

Is it real how you smile at me…

…and I emptily stare at you

Is this real…for me here,

Missing you there?

          

Reviews

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

Whoa!!! Very powerfully spoken! This speaks volumes to what I'm sure tons of people (married, involved), I'm sure feel at one point in their respective relationships. I'm sure you're gonna get a sermon from someone saying "It's about finding the passion with the one you're with, blah, blah, blah...." But I see and respect the moment of expression that you've written here without analyzing the solution. Short, but strong and telling. I think people will feel this. I know I did! Is that why I'm single? Hmmmmmmmmmmmm

[Passion for Literature]

this is a very genuine view what happens when one feels a void and looks else where to fullfil their desires

"Is it real how you smile at me�
�and I emptily stare at you"...the notion of unrequited love is so eloquently expressed

"Is this real�for me here,
Missing you there?"...the illusion created by circumstance, but not accepted emotionally


NICELY WRITTEN & BEAUTIFULLY EXPRESSED!

[Adrian K. Smith]

An interesting work in the manner in which the work leaves one to think about the end of love instead of the beginning of love. So many pieces touch upon getting everything together to get everything started, and to be honest - I am not sure why they bother. If everything is not together to get started, it is telling you something. No, it is when they have been together and then they have that disconnect; where we start to see the potential tragedy of love. You capture the blunt concept of here and there with a certain elegance, taking it beyond the simple here and there - but not burying us in so many details that we cannot personalize this for ourselves. Yes, so many times in love - as love begins to wane - instead of taking the moment to work on the here - people will go off seeking the there...

[darkgurl]

This is a most beautiful write here, like this write alot...Kim

[Ravenskald]

An interesting concept and short like a haiku
"Is it real how you smile at me�
�and I frown at you"
It seems to reflect wither a long distance relationship or an unreal one.
You leave me wondering what the real inspiration is

~Raven

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Woooooow. This is beautifully stated....very deep undertones too. You can feel the distance between supposed lovers. Very nice.

[Kristin Brecoe]

nicely written. =] i had to read it a couple of times because i felt this connection that i think many readers would understand. this is a good piece. i'm going to share it with my friend.

-kristin

[bluessadmood]

lovely the way you put it,for the mind can know no limit ,it can be everywhere,i really liked this...

[A LaDy NaMeD D]

here or there...
....*my long distant relationship lol*
so i looked at it differently than others.
to me it was like....
can i love you here
......when your way over there..

At least it was like that until the word creeping came into the mix. Then i saw it how others saw it. I love your style.

Danni

[Angelic Darkness]

Finding love, keeping it is so hard to do. Your emotion here is
of longing for that promise. AD

[Samantha Ellen]

Oh wow. I thought it was quite good. It's to the point. And realtable. :)