Zephyr

In the eyes of the soul,

In the depths of the heart,

Among glimpses of feelings,

A zephyr of warmth and comfort

Soothes you from dusk 'till dawn.

Author's Note

Long time no see! I got inspired for this short poem from a soft gentle breeze that made me smile while I was walking home after a hard day at school this week. I hope you enjoy it. Lots of hugs :)

Reviews

[Kibbles and Quips]

Howdy!

Thanks for sharing this poem! I quite enjoyed, especially paired with picture, which I believe to have complemented the feeling and tone of your poem quite well.

The poem is short, but not too short, and doesn't overstay it's welcome. Like, what you said inspired you, its' that fleeting epiphanic feeling of pleasantness and calm.

My only advice is to take a look at the last two lines - their rhythm. They feel gummed up, just a tad. Otherwise, this is very well done.

Thank you for sharing!
Kenn

[LylaCrystal]

Thank you very much for the kind words and advice. I appreciate it and I am glad that you liked my poem :)

[light and ashes]

An immensely comforting lyrical poem. How I wish it would sing in my ears.

[LylaCrystal]

Thank you very much! I'm glad you liked it!

[light and ashes]

You're welcome!

[Jacob Clifford]

Much like that comforting breeze, this poem comes and goes too quickly, impossible to grasp, leaving one wanting for more. It can be difficult to capture abstract feelings, such as would be brought by a gentle breeze, but you've done well at it.

[LylaCrystal]

Thank you!

[Sneh]

I rejoiced , could feel the soft stroke of breeze!
And a beautiful picture..,stay blessed! :)

[LylaCrystal]

Thank you!