flawed

thoughts during a rainstorm

artwork by mandy tsung

the wind whistles

then whips the palm fronds 

with an almost evil intensity

neon lightning rips through the sky

i search for answers

but every discovery turns into a disruption

miscalculations

disarticulations

raindrops rumba on the roof

water whispers to the windows

a palm frond takes flight

then

an epiphany

the epitome of the absurd

yes that's it

the answer to everything

my life is grammatically flawed!

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow..."raindrops rumba on the roof"
what a line...
analogy of life to grammar...so cool.
first line i read as "wind whistles"
unless that was intended because of the last line.
but still....i am also searching for answers...and not finding many at all...
great poem, Lydi.
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Aha, that is a typo and I will fix it right now. That's what I get for not checking my work! Thanks for the review and for finding that, Jacob. Lydi**

[barleygirl]

This is some of the most delightful wordplay I've seen around here in weeks! Your alliteration is off the charts, not just well-crafted but perfectly-balanced heavy peppering that makes my toes curl! You convey how my mind can become pinball-like as I watch & bounce around within nature scene, a ton of turbulence, especially storms in the mnts here! Love this playful romp of words! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Lydia Shutter]

Oh, Margie, you just made my day! Thank you so much. I needed this today! Lydi**

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

In the most beautiful way ...a way in which no others could be...we are all on different journeys and different lessons to be learnt...through the storms of life we rise out of the ashes to try again even when we might not understand why..wonderfully written🌹

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much for your review. Lydi*

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Pleasure 🌹

[Lea Sheryn]

I can really relate to this one. The thunderstorms roll in every afternoon where I live.

[Lydia Shutter]

Here too Lea. We are in South Florida. You? Thanks for stopping by. Lydi**

[Lea Sheryn]

Mid- Florida, on the gulf coast.

You're welcome. :-))

[Chris Shaw]

Fabulous imagery here Lydi** and also some wonderful phrases.

raindrops rumba on the roof, is one of them. That really got me listening, and I heard it. Clever write. I never leave your page without feeling fully satisfied. You consistently produce first rate poetry.

Chris

[Lydia Shutter]

Such a lovely thing to say, Chris. Thank you very much. Lydi**

[Chris Shaw]

You are more than welcome and it is nothing but the truth :)

[emmajoy]

Your language paints so vividly yet your thoughts are as clear as the rain dancing down on that roof, Lydi! You slowly, carefully create mind sketches til they're fully framed and glorious. I wonder if you think mistakes create alternative tangents? Your writing always adds yet another dimension to.. whatever.

[Lydia Shutter]

Oh, absolutely some mistakes are glorious discoveries, Emma. Never doubt that. Thank you so much for visiting. Things have been a bit hectic in my life and I have not been on WC much. I appreciate this review. Hope all is well in your world. Lydi**

[emmajoy]

Perhaps wind down when you can.. helps the soles of your feet as well as your spirit.

[Desert Knave]

Amazing alliteration and a message that applies to far too many aspects of life ... my / your / their life is "flawed" (grammatically and otherwise). - Jim

[Lydia Shutter]

Hi Jim! Thanks so much for stopping by. Hope all is well with you. Lydi**

[Desert Knave]

Scraping through a harsh summer, but did get a poem roughed in ... just letting it sit before I look for things to polish.

[Kumarmani Mahakul]

I give 100/100 in rating to this excellent poem.

[Kumarmani Mahakul]

Any discovery grinds mind and gives a new perception. Lightning rips through the sky you search for answers. Raindrops on the roof whisper and you have heard the nature's thrill. This poem is excellently penned with beauty of wonderful vision. Your effort is highly appreciated.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you very much, Kumarmani. I appreciate the review. Lydi**

[Patricia Wedel]

Lydi dear... an awakening often occurs in a storm
of emotions. "raindrops rumba on the roof" and
the rain whistles" There is a realization of
answers... when our heart follows a rainbow of
promises. truly a touching tethering of prayers.
As ever, Pat

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you very much, Pat. Your reviews are always so special to me. Lydi**