i never told you

artwork by charles carter

                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                         

the stormy sky screamed at us

while the ducks scratched and thumped

on the shingled roof

just to remind us we were not alone 

on that dark night

your words were chunky

filled with extra meaning

and even extra syllables

you emphasized them

as if they were a percussion instrument

drumsticks beating out a mesmerizing rhythm

i never told you

to me they were like a banquet

laid out for my dining pleasure

tonight i will remember them

as they pull me through the trapdoor of sleep

becoming the accompaniment of my forever dreams

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Such a wonderful memory to have Lydi**. Sometimes we do hold back on our words only to regret and wish we hadn't at a later date. This is a beautiful write, filled with love and longing for someone who was special to you. Imagery laden. My broadband signal is playing up so I can't view your artwork this time. I will have to return to it tomorrow.

Chris

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you very much, Chris. Lydi**

[Chris Shaw]

And as expected your artwork is beautiful.

[Lydia Shutter]

So glad you were able to see it!

[adichie]

The way you speak to it, Lydia!!! I have to believe that through some cosmic force of which we are unaware, this write resonates like a tuning fork in the heart or perhaps the memories of your purveyor of words. This is too much energy not to get through, not to be shared with us, but also with him.

Skillful, beautiful writing, my friend!!! :):)

Deb

[Lydia Shutter]

What a lovely thing to say, adichie. Thank you so much. I hope the message does travel through time and space. Lydi**

[Sami Khalil]

There is art to your words, tenderness to your emotions and selflessness in sharing. All have rhythms, all have rhymes, all have pulses. You are just right. No need for extra familiarity.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much, Sami. Lydi*

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome Lydi*

[Patricia Wedel]

Sometimes even breathing can be heard above the
windpipes of Scottish music... and we hear the snare drums
softly whisper what we never told that special someone.
The stormy sky is often an accompaniment to our dreams.
Even Van Gogh has paintings of dreams of starry skies.
truly, Pat

[Lydia Shutter]

As always, Pat, your words are poetic. Thank you so much for the visit. Lydi**

[Patricia Wedel]

You are welcome... "words laid out for your dining pleasure" is a phrase close to my heart, and you seem to know how to place romantic notes of sounds throughout your poem. truly, Pat

[Kelly Scheppers]

We all have words left unsaid. Too bad life doesn't grant us a reset button we can push, or a rewind for a do-over. You always wow me, Lydi!

[Lydia Shutter]

Wouldn't it be perfect to have a rewind...and sometimes a fast forward? :) Thanks so much, Kelly. Lydi**

[barleygirl]

This is wildly alluring and captivating. The longer "chunky words" passage is mesmerizing & popping. The ending is such an affectionate way to think of however we each feel "visited" by someone not near. Your writing has been at a fevered pitch, even more than usual, lately! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Lydia Shutter]

Such a lovely thing to say, Margie. Thank you very much. Lydi**

[emmajoy]

'.. i never told you - to me they were like a banquet - laid out for my dining pleasure .. '

Have a feeling that those words were sincere, plain and simple; familiarity breeding anything but contempt Tis often the natural flow that touches the heart the most. Better the daisies than the orchids, perhaps? Better holding back than full-out everything, maybe? Who knows for certain!

[Lydia Shutter]

Indeed, dear Emma....the plain and simple will grab me and keep me every time. You always get to the heart of my words. Thanks so much for the review. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very romantic write...it's interesting, too, that you made this so tender in a way even with the percussion, the drumsticks...the chunky words...but it is what the speaker needed to hear and they all made an impression on her...for sure.

[Lydia Shutter]

Life is full of surprising events....and poetry reflects that. From the right person, even "chunky words" can be loving. Thanks for the review, Jacob. Lydi**

[Jade]

Such a lovely write that is full of emotions. Nicely written

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much, Brandie. Lydi**