still worth

artwork by felix mas

back then i knew

even if i didn't admit it

our dreams didn't mesh

and they never would

it was a relationship based on the suspicion of failure

and a pulsating promise of perhaps

yet it hyperventilated and died a prolonged death

ending up a chalk outline on a sidestreet of life

still, in rosy fleshy memory

i remember it as the suggestion of summer

hot and steamy

a romantic novel with french phrases

impossible to put down

a lilting tune playing on a moonlit beach

yes, a vibrant love destined to live on

through some sort of adolescent eternity

and still worth a heavy sigh and a smile

Reviews

[Neville]

I sense a moment of looking back and reminiscing fondly but with a long and accustomed acceptance of the inevitable.... I've had a few such moments myself, as I'm sure most do... and yes, they never fail to draw a sigh and smile or two...... characteristically beautifully crafted my dear friend........ Neville

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much, Neville. I always appreciate your lovely reviews. Lydi**

[Neville]

..................x

[Coyote Poetry]

A wonderful story in the poetry dear Lydia. All of us need a romantic place and some late night dancing. I liked the feel of the words. Romantic and very sweet. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Lydia Shutter]

You are reading so many of my words today. Once again, thank you. Lydi**

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved your work today and you are welcome dear Lydia.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

“Still worth” is a fitting title for this contemplative poem Lydi. Great metaphor, imagery, rhythm, first person narration style and form with indented pauses and punctuation left for the reader to determine. First verse describes the stunted growth and ‘murder’ of a relationship ‘ending up a chalk outline on a sidestreet of life”-brilliant line. Second verse redeems it for its remembered passion, sensuality, romance- “Still worth”-yes, absolutely.

[Lydia Shutter]

Such a splendid review. Thank you, Annette! Lydi**

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

You are very welcome Lydi.:))

[Chris Shaw]

a pulsating promise of perhaps - how good is that! Some romances are destined to fail, but they can still evoke some happy memories and a smile years later. Lovely work Lydi

Chris

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much, Christine. Lydi**

[barleygirl]

Your perfectly stated scenario reminds me of the kind of guy we leave, then we see him much later on & he’s lookin’ so good, we’re tempted to go sniffing around again. Hopefully we’ve learned that lesson. I love your description of how this situation starts off bad & doesn’t get any better – these are classic lines of clever understatement! Sometimes it’s just a slow oppressive crush that snuffs out all vivacity & you’ve painted your word portrait with originality (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much, Margie. Thing is, if it didn't work the first time, it ain't gonna work the second time around either! Lydi**

[Ayvid N]

"still, in rosy fleshy memory"

what an exquisite choice of words and this poem is so replete with them. Sometimes a love does not last yet it never fails to leave something special to remember. Moments of bliss once shared, now gone, yet their scent lingers on. The heat dissipates, the warmth lingers on. Thanks for such beautiful poetry, dear Lydi.

[Lydia Shutter]

Divya, thank you for understanding my words and your lovely review. Lydi**

[Sami Khalil]

Your poetry leaves us in sighs and smiles indeed. Some things or relationships are still worth the try albeit prospects of failure. Work is needed to sort out things in life as through the journey. Marvleous.

[Kelly Scheppers]

"it was a relationship based on the suspicion of failure
and a pulsating promise of perhaps
yet it hyperventilated and died a prolonged death
ending up a chalk outline on a sidestreet of life"


Your poetry always elicits a heavy sigh from me, Lydi. Your metaphors here simply speak for themselves with a most thunderous applause!

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much, Kelly...oh, and the icon I am using is me in front of a butterfly sculpture in Haiti! :) Lydi**

[Kelly Scheppers]

...that's SO cool!

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks! When I saw the sculpture, I had to have that photo!

[Patricia Wedel]

A poet with the pen of Ms. Fisher mysteries... "ending up a chalk outline on the side street of life"...
An adolescent eternity and still worth a heavy sigh and a smile. Those were the days when a "crush" was not an "orange freeze" that froze your brain. Romance was total commitment to the moment of eternity.
Too soon we age as others pass away. truly, Pat

[Lydia Shutter]

Aging, though, is a privilege, my friend. Thank you so much for the wonderful review...and the reference to Ms. Fisher! Lydi**

[BlackRose]

A love that once was so thriving has died and withered away leaving the ash remains and sighs and of those happy memories. Lovely as always. Enjoyed it.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you for the lovely review. Lydi**

[Ardra]

it was a relationship based on the suspicion of failure
and a pulsating promise of perhaps
yet it hyperventilated and died a prolonged death

Mmm I guess few remain like that....which makes us sigh and smile ...
As always beautiful...and more beautiful every word you create... :) always fan of your words..

[Lydia Shutter]

Ardra, you are so kind. thank you. Lydi**