the rain

even as the rain punishes the window pane

with fierce retribution

yearnings peek out over the horizon

memories of midnight meetings

of a love never meant to be

creep into my consciousness

no, it would never work

and truly it didn=t

and yet your voice speaking my name

the way no one ever had before

or ever will again

is all i hear tonight

even as the rain punishes the window pane

 

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

i looked at the picture and thought...wow...perfect to set up a warm and thoughtful mood ..then read your poem and looked again and thought...wow! how empty the scene is
what a difference a poem makes eh!? opening two lines are brilliant says i ..so powerful and instant .. and you know Lydia .. love and all its different whirlwinds since hearts were born ... has been spoken, written and acted ... and in your poem it is all brand new ...so relatable .. great language and flows as naturally as music ..
E.

[Lydia Shutter]

Oh yes, every single thing about love and romance has been written....but each read makes it a bit different.....depending on our experience. Thank you so much, E. Always pleased to have a review from you. Lydi**

[Levi Levin]

It's amazing how nature and memories intersect. Great job!

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks for reading this one from 6 months ago...makes the words new again. Lydi**

[Levi Levin]

Your welcome!

[Moonie]

The endearing quality of this lies in the fact, that the incidences that you talk of are relatable for everyone. That's the secret to a good romantic poem. The scenes should be specific, but the details should be loose enough so that everyone can fit into the description! I find writing romantic poems extremely difficult, and that makes me appreciate the silent genius behind this poem furthermore.

[Lydia Shutter]

What a lovely review! I tend to be a romantic. I find romance in corners others seem to overlook. I appreciate your kind words. Lydi**

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

even as the rain punishes the window pane.
Lydi** still your words spell magic again. Fantastic!

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Sky. Lydi**

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Welcome Lydi**

[Trace]

This poem brought back a very fond memory of a stormy evening when in the throws of passion I whispered the name of the woman I loved...... Problem was ...it wasn't her I was with.
Lesson learned.... Always use a pet name... Honey.... Baby... Sweetie....
It will prevent a broken heart. And possibly a finger or window or plates....

Love your poetry.

Trace

[Lydia Shutter]

Smiling here...you naughty boy! Thanks for reading and the review, Trace. Lydi**

[Ayvid N]

Rain has a hypnotic quality to it. It often drums the window pane to remind one of times and people gone by...Such a beautiful effect created here!

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much, Divya. Lydi**

[Tom]

' the rain taps a beat,
of a love most discreet ' .. A reflective reverie, soft, sensual and so beautifully quilled Lydia!

[Lydia Shutter]

You are the King of Rhyme! Thank you, Tom. Lydi**

[h d e rushin]

after a million rain poems read and then thought about...This is the most heartfelt.......very lovely Lydia....dana

[Lydia Shutter]

Quite the compliment, Dana. Thank you. Lydi**

[Ardra]

no, it would never work
and truly it didn't
and yet your voice speaking my name
the way no one ever had before
or ever will again
is all i hear tonight

You words are always very simple and to the point.. all who have been in love and lost it not knowing if it would have ever worked can relate to this beautiful creation... you are one of my Fav. poet here at cafe :)

[Lydia Shutter]

Galadriel, that is quite the compliment! Thank you so much. Lydi**

[Paul Bell]

Sad memory indeed. What if. Could it work. Would it work. We'll never know. Life in its truest form.
Hope you didn't suffer to much damage in the storm.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Paul. We were very fortunate. While we lost a couple trees, we are safe and our home is in tact. Lydi**

[Paul Bell]

Must admit, i was thinking of you. Glad you're safe.

[Lydia Shutter]

I appreciate that, Paul. Thanks.