we can still dance

artwork by anna razumovskaya

just beneath the surface of the day

under the rumblings and grumblings of life

there is a crack in the darkness

come, take a peek through my telescope

do you see the spot of light?

there plays our song

if you listen carefully you will hear its sweet notes

and we can still dance to it, you know

if we’d only stop chasing the minutes

that have not yet ticked

stop inventing excuses

the dance floor is waiting

and so are my arms

Reviews

[Moonie]

A very beautiful message is conveyed in this short poem...we must not fret about the times that have yet not ticked, or about the times that are long gone...it is hard to let go of all these inhibitions and be totally care free, but we can always try once in a while...to make each moment count..

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you for seeing my meaning so clearly, Moon. I appreciate the review. Lydi**

[Paul Bell]

You hit the nail on the head. We spend so much time on nothingness, when we should be out there living.
Time waits for no one. Get dancing.

[Lydia Shutter]

Absolutely! Thank you, Paul. Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

soft and gentle waltzing in the bliss of "our song" ..i am just a bit jealous of your speaker Lydia ... of the two loves in my life we never had that "moment" .. perhaps during the "...crack in the darkness" ...i should seek it out eh!? :) lovely read experience ..wouldn't change a thing
E.

[Lydia Shutter]

Ah, but E, your life is not over yet. Plenty of time left to dance, right? Thanks for the review. Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

:) no it is most certainly not! love love love to ya Lyd!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This is full of sadness for wasted time and it conjured up the Eagles song of that name for me. It has a haunting melody just like this piece.

[Lydia Shutter]

We all waste time....and it is truly criminal. Thank you, John. Lydi**

[Ken Simm.]

I cannot dance at all, but I can appreciate this loveingly crafted romantic poem about still having the sparks in a realtionship through the years.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Ken. Lydi**

[Ardra]

As always beautifully done Lydi :)

if we’d only stop chasing the minutes
that have not yet ticked

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much. Lydi**

[jazzymars]

Touching! Though it has no rhymes and irregular syllable count per lines, the message is striking. I love it.

[Lydia Shutter]

It's called free verse, jazzy. Thank you for the visit. Lydi

[jazzymars]

Thanks for the info Lydi

[...]

Lovely delight of your creativity. Poem more like song .I can hear birds sing above dancing couples.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you for your review. Lydi*

[...]

You welcome is very adorable and amusing piece

[Sami Khalil]

"stop chasing the minutes
that have not yet ticked
stop inventing excuses
the dance floor is waiting"

We to dance is up to the right moment, the right beats and the right invitation from the other partner. Just dive fully and enjoy every moment. Keep the rhythm between the two hearts and ears. An excellent one with a marvelous painting...:)....

[Lydia Shutter]

Sami, thank you so much for the lovely review...and for noticing the artwork I chose. Lydi**

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. ...:::))))

[Lorry]

We do love watching that clock and seeing the seconds, minutes and hours disappear before our very lethargic eyes, instead of living the moment and being thankful for that little light that still reaches us.
Beautiful and elegant words, as always Lydi.

[Lydia Shutter]

Indeed, we must live in the moment. Thank you, Neo. Lydi**

[Lorry]

Welcome :)

[writ rajat]

Indirectly requesting your partner to dance nice to read

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Writ. Lydi**