chardonnay

fridays are not quite what they used to be, but....

the heat of an unclothed fantasy

renders the air sweet

words kiss my palms

flashy pheromones flow

secreted syllables samba cautiously

i read my words aloud

rolling my tongue over them

to taste omissions - - swallow errors

to perhaps uncover that certain dash of elan

then have an affair with it

but alas, blank verse and end rhyme

argue uncontrollably on the page before me

till the glittering voltage of a marginal metaphor

gives aerodynamic power

to yet another crumpled morsel of linen bond

indeed, slumber will find me

after i pledge my love and devotion

to only my trusty chardonnay

 

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I'm not sure, but I gather this Friday night was less than satisfying becuz you fell asleep with your empty goblet instead of your hunny? *smile* As always, your sensual style is exquisite & your writing wordplay rivals Jacob, both of you with amazingly smooth & original literary metaphors!

[Lydia Shutter]

Nah, poetry is not always a reflection of real life...as you know. I don't even drink alcohol! :) Thanks for the great review, Margie. Lydi**

[Sheila Kline]

Your words remind me of "To be, nor not to be"; that is the question of what form of poetry shall one choose for a particular moment, or to convey a special thought. It is an easy answer for some as they write only in one form, but the variety we have as poets is a gift.

Just as the winsome face peers into the lined up glasses of wine, we may drink from one of the other, or take a sip from all. Love and devotion as this allows the writer to create lasting imagery, just as you have with your words!
And isn't it wonderful that we may use that crumpled piece of linen bond to wipe up the spills? LOL

Wonderful............as always!!

[Lydia Shutter]

It is always a treat to get one of your reviews! Yes, we have many choices as poets, but I seem to come back to my "comfortable" way of writing most often. Thank you very much, Sheila. Your new icon is lovely! Is that Sheila behind those Foster Grants? :) Lydi**

[Sheila Kline]

OMG, it just might be me but my Foster Grants won't tell.........LOL I remain an enigma.

[Lydia Shutter]

Never change, my friend!

[Einstein Noodle]

"secreted syllables samba cautiously" love it!!! so disappointed with the twist in your closing .. thank goodness for the "trusty chardonnay" at least ...what a fine poem says i .. so much to savor and enjoy ...your classy and fine Lydia ...it shouts through in your poems but especially this one says i!
E.

[Lydia Shutter]

[emmajoy]

'.. till the glittering voltage of a marginal metaphor ~ gives aerodynamic power ~ to yet another crumpled morsel of linen bond .. '

There's something special about a full glass of anything. There's something exceptional about a half glass that's converted expectation to unmitigated pleasure. As does your words. This poem really is poetry of the best vintage - always wanted to type that.. now's the time. :)

[Lydia Shutter]

The best vintage....love that! Thank you so much, Emma. You've started my day with a smile. Will walk a little taller today! Lydi**

[emmajoy]

Don't trip over the neighbours' empties on your way!
Love your words, have and will. :)

[emmajoy]

Oh heck, was being silly, so hope that first line doesn't read badly.. please delete if needs be..

[Lydia Shutter]

No need to delete...truth is, I have not had an alcoholic drink in over 30 years. Just imbibe in poetry! :)

[emmajoy]

I didn't want to offend your neighbours to be honest. Had remembered you don't drink! Think i spilled my glass of wine when you told me that.. :)

[Lydia Shutter]

LOL making me laugh!

[emmajoy]

Good, laughter steadies the hand!

Must disappear before i take root.. here to repay the wonderful kindness of so many reviews. Saturday is my day to remember that.. back later. xx

[Coyote Poetry]

Good wine and good company make good poetry too. Nice flow of thoughts led to perfect ending. Thank you Lydia for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you very much, John. Lydi**

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Lydia.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

being a free verse lover...i especially like the last stanza..

but love the "secreted syllables doing the samba"---
oh yes, it's Friday...with a nip of wine.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks very much, Jacob. Lydi**

[Kelly Scheppers]

Lydi, you remind me of an adept juggler the way you execute words into the context of a poem. You truly shine in this one!

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Kelly. Have a great weekend. Lydi**

[Ken Simm.]

I can appreciate the irony here in this lovely smooth piece. And although I don't drink anymore I can still remember thanks to pieces such as this. An excellent use of metaphor.

[Lydia Shutter]

Actually, Ken, I stopped drinking over 30 years ago....but in poetry, all things are still possible. Thank you so much! Lydi***

[Ken Simm.]

I know I must have one of the best oxymorns ever. A collection of Whiskies. I don't drink any of them although some are quite old and rare.

[Lydia Shutter]

Life does not have to make logical sense, my friend. It is far more interesting when it does not.read moreLife does not have to make logical sense, my friend. It is far more interesting when it does not.

[Ken Simm.]

Mainly gifts from people who don't know I don't drink. I sometimes get them out and look at them however.