an open ended poem

an open ended poem beckons

vagrant syllables queue up to be chosen

knowing their chances

of immortality and fame

lie just beyond the next couplet

 

it’s a sign of the times i tell ya

financial assets be damned

pages have been blank before

all that really matters now is rememberin’

it ain't worth a dime

if it ain't got that rhyme

 

words ride on roller skates

to join the competition

damn right they “got” ambition

struggling for special position

wanna be in that golden edition

  

stick a silk flower in that lapel baby

the rain “don’t” matter today

the shortest distance between two points

is that unwritten line

the one i am gonna complete

 

Reviews

[barleygirl]

It's nice to read something from you that has a more straightforward, down-to-earth, & slightly abrasive message, rather than your usual smooth flowing verse! *wink! wink!* I can relate to so many of your sentiments here, especially the first stanza, which is so delightful & hopeful. I love the extended rhyme over 4 lines in stanza 3. And I love the sassy tone of the first 2 lines in stanza 4, which convey the grit & determination of tackling a stubborn poem that needs finishing!

[Lydia Shutter]

So glad you could relate, Margie. Yea, I can be abrasive...ask anyone who has gotten on my bad side! :) I appreciate your review. Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

you go my friend!!! :) very enjoyable read for me .. ambition needs a balance says i ... too much seems to kill the very goal sought after .. not enough and ... well ... we wouldn't be here would we?! ;) your title, first line and closing line a bit ironic aren't they? i like the content, form and almost conversational laid back feel to this one ..kinda makes me feel good.
E.

[Lydia Shutter]

Yup, ironic....which is what most of my life has been, E! :) Thanks for the review. Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

i think irony puts a strong certain kind of smile on the face of wisdom ;)

[Bacchus]

the first section i really enjoyed
and when it got to rollerskating
i immediately traveled back to jr. high...
which made me feel awkward...
connecting that with the unwritten line
is an interesting feeling- i needed to shake
of the odd choosing of couples skating
to think again! :)
So great Lyd- smart and fun.

[Lydia Shutter]

Glad you enjoyed it, Bacchus. Thanks for the review. Lydi**

[Tony Jordan]

This had that old Vaudeville feel to it - I could hear the MC - the guy with the snoz - Jimmy Durante (couldn't think there) saying some of these lines.
It painted sublime pictures in glorious Technicolor (TM) and left me smilin'
"Rat-tat-tat-at-cha"
Encore
Encore!!

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Tony. Yes, that is what I was going for. Lydi**

[Tony Jordan]

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