that place

have i mentioned lately how much i dislike december?

photo courtesy of pinterest

will you drive me back to that place?

that place where i was sure

who i was and what was important

the very spot where i became me

where the tongue of night licked stars from my lips

and stress was kept prisoner in a far off realm

oh yes!

i was positive it would never escape

yet it writhed out from its captivity

cutting through the barbed wire of life

bringing with it uncertainty

and a chill felt ten miles north of no where

now i am stuck sharing a park bench with it

so do me a huge favor, will you?

let me hitch a ride back to that other place

Reviews

[D Connolly]

This makes me think of that time between adolescents and adulthood; not a child, but not a grown up. I was certain of who I was, I had no worries what-so-ever (chose to ignore all responsibility) and I was happy because I didn't think of anyone but myself... when adulthood came (many years later than it should have actually), I had to re-examine the person I thought I was, or maybe the person I wanted others to see....? I had to accept responsibility for myself and my life, and the stress that comes with that. Once in a while I would like to go back to being innocent and free, but then I realize that I was just stupid, and that was my cage. I wasn't free at all... this piece definitely makes me think about a lot.

[Lydia Shutter]

I'm pleased I could provoke so much introspection for you. Thank you very much for the review. Lydi**

[Manu]

Very very beautiful write, Lydia ! The best part of it that i could relate to it. I guess December is on hit list of many folks.
I especially loved these lines:
that place where i was sure
who i was and what was important
the very spot where i became me..
And What a lovely picture !

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you very much, Gorthi. While I am pleased you enjoyed the write, I am sorry you can relate. Lydi**

[Alfred Kukitz]

I like the battlefield flavor as though mortar fire and artillery are shelling your soul.

The Tongue of night.......great line!

Regards,
Al

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you very much, Al. Lydi**

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Lydia,
"That Place" reminded me of the inner resistance of happy and sad- dark and light; the desire to be at peace but struggling instead. Introspective rooms are good to visit sometimes your poem was my chance...............Bless you and your wisdom...............Kathy

[Lydia Shutter]

I am pleased you were able to get something out of my words, Kathy. Thank you so much for the lovely review. Lydi**

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Your welcome and please know your voice means a lot!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i see this more metaphorically...that other place is how the world used to be, how life used to be...i want to go back to that other place too...and i am waiting on the bus to take me there.

such a good write...
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

You? Seeing something metaphorically? No way! :) Thank you for the review, Jacob. Lydi**

[Papaya]

I hate December too. I'd like to go back to a place that was 'before' ... So relatable Lydi. Not what I'm used to reading from you but so good.

[Lydia Shutter]

This time of year brings out the melancholy in me. Thanks, Ana. Merry Christmas to you. Lydi**

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Lydi... The mid-north is having a blizzard warning this weekend.
I am chilly even though the sun comes out most every day in Virginia. Your poetry is refreshing as
roses under the snow. truly, Pat

[Lydia Shutter]

Stay warm, Pat. Be careful in that icy weather. thanks for the review. Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

varooom varoom! screeeeeeeeeeeeeech! hop in Lydia ;)
such an enchanting melancholy look back for that special glow .. this line for me is absolutely stunning:
"where the tongue of night licked stars from my lips"
if the entire rest of the poem were in Greek (which i do not speak nor understand) it would not matter ... but your story overall is captivating and sweeps me along .. the pic is perfect! i like the whole ball game ..home run for me ..glad you shared this one
E.

[Lydia Shutter]

The excitement of your words makes me feel so special, E. Thank you very much. I would hitch a ride with you anywhere. Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

you are special Lydia!

[Lydia Shutter]

As you are, E....thank you.

[Ken Simm.]

What a beautiful set of thoughts Lydi. You are talking about thoughts we all have here but very few can articulate so well.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Ken. Lydi**

[Miss Sharon]

Wow! A tad different from other writes Lydi. This is mesmerizing and I'm making it a keeper for my "Friends' Poems" book.

[Lydia Shutter]

I am honored, Sharon. thank you. Lydi**

[Miss Sharon]

You are so very welcome Lydi! The photo jumped off the page to get my attention but the words just penetrated my heart.

[barleygirl]

I really love this message & the way you've word-crafted it! I also hate December (and many others, since I'm seeing this type of message a lot now!) Your expressions are very dynamic ("it writhed out from its captivity") . . . and I also love the overall idea of wanting to return to a time & place when life was ALL THAT & MORE! Good job of leaving us with a haunting longing . . .

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much, Margie. Love your new photo! Lydi**

[barleygirl]

Thank you . . . (((HUGS)))