cut through

photography by ilya rashap

invisible fence posts define our boundaries

my lips quiver as i tread precariously near the precipice

your arm brushes mine

i see your eyes check my reaction

my thoughts weave through yours

my fingers yearn to touch you right

there

my tongue traces the silvered mouth of the soda can

knowing only you will quench my thirst

boundaries be damned

i cut through the fence

Reviews

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Now isn't this an erotic piece! Phew!!

And here my first impression was that you were writing about a sugar lust!
This is a very alluring piece of writing. Hidden thoughts, careful side glances, sensual urges to take the leap....ideas and feelings that anyone with a secret admiration for someone could relate to completely. And the devouring of the soda just illuminates the idea.

I don't think i can look at a can of coke the same way again! :)
Very well written!

[Lydia Shutter]

Smiling here. Great review. Thank you so much. Lydi**

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Powerful. Full of passion yet subtlety applied. The final stanza is so well portrayed and imaginable.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you very much, John. Lydi**

[Ken Simm.]

Ahem. Now this is in a loosening of the collar and fanning oneself class of its own.

[Lydia Shutter]

:) It was a Friday night write for sure. Thanks so much, Ken. Lydi**

[Ken Simm.]

Nontheless top shelf.

[Cassie]

awwwww.....the soda will not quench your thirst but only him. How nice this is to tell some one. wow but then boundaries....this is clearly staring at someone but then it is impossible to have them. you have painted a picture in my mind lyd and now am laughing

[Lydia Shutter]

Laughter is good for the soul, my friend. Thank you so much. Lydi**

[D Connolly]

Fettered love becoming unfettered!! I love the sensual image of the soda can. I have been there!

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much. Lydi**

[barleygirl]

It never ceases to amaze me how many different ways you can craft a sensual message! I think teetering on the boundary for a good long bit of teasing is one of the sexiest aspects of spending time together. I guess that's the beauty of being older . . . slowing sucking that hard candy to make it last, instead of biting into it & having it gone too soon . . . *smile*

[Lydia Shutter]

OMG what a GREAT line, Barley...slow sucking that hard candy!!!! You naughty girl you! LOL Thanks for the great review. Lydi**

[Valentine]

I burst out laughing at the last two lines, a very clever write. Loved it. Valentine

[Lydia Shutter]

Glad I put a smile on your face! Thanks for the review. Lydi***

[Sanober]

"my tongue traces the silvered mouth of the soda can
knowing only you will quench my thirst"
this is as hot and enticing as it gets. i always like to pause a little, and let the full power of your words wash over me. heavy sigh!!

[Lydia Shutter]

You know I still like the sensual/romantic genre best. Thanks so much, Sanober. Lydi**

[Lyn Anderson]

Wow. Sexy and romantic, takes the every day and makes it something unique.

[Lydia Shutter]

Every day CAN be romantic....in poetry! :) Thanks so much, KL. Lydi**

[Patricia Wedel]

An attraction can be a dubious situation...
sending caution to the wind... brushing arms
with the romance of his or her charms...
truly, Pat

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks, Pat. Always happy to see reviews from you. Lydi**