dear Lydi, gorgeous art that seems to
reflect the mood of your poem. Yes, nature seems to be
performing a planetary dance as we watch buds unfolding
with a spicy cinnamon madrigal of passion... A melange of all things
wonderful mingles with a lingering hint of ginger scent. This is
exactly how my senses respond when observing the first delicate
blooms of spring... lasting into many tomorrow's. truly, Pat
booms on a
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And spring will be here before you know it, Pat. Thank you so much for your review. Lydi**
dear Lydi, gorgeous art that seems to
reflect the mood of your poem. Yes, nature seems to be
performing a planetary dance as we watch buds unfolding
with a spicy cinnamon madrigal of passion... A melange of all things
wonderful mingles with a lingering hint of ginger scent. This is
exactly how my senses respond when observing the first delicate
blooms of spring... lasting into many tomorrow's. truly, Pat
booms on a
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8 Years Ago
And spring will be here before you know it, Pat. Thank you so much for your review. Lydi**
I'm tempted to shout, "Lydia Rocks!" but why should I when she provides such a rich and elegant tapestry to choose from? "She mingles, lingers, and tickles the senses," to start.
Thanks for the share.
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8 Years Ago
Antonyo, I appreciate your review. YOU rock! :) Lydi**
I might've said this before, but look here folks, this is how it's done. I've seen poems written that attempt to let words tumble out, willy nilly, thinking it's meant to be unedited & pristine, yadda, yadda.
This is how it's done to look totally effortless, but anyone who's done it knows this is a fine piece of manicuring. I almost had an orgasm from the alliteration & consonance thru-out, but especially when you'd get on a freakin' roll, carrying it on & on (example below). Not that many people could get away with it, & not have it be too manufactured. But your indulgence is nestled in subtleties, such that the balance is perfect.
The absolute perfection in word choice done to highlight the sound "ing" . . .
"mingles with a lingering hint of ginger scent" . . . combined with rich vivid sensual qualities to every single word you finally decide upon. This is what word crafting looks like, designed to look like it just tumbled out of a slightly vacant mind.
(It's not that unfettered blathering that's poured out with mostly confusion & undecipherable attempts at metaphorical writing, etc.)
The sensuality of your writing is so sorely missed in so many weak attempts at poetry supposedly to be about "sex" . . . this, gentlemen, is how sensual writing is done, if you want your audience to be women. Oh baby, I think I'm going lesbian, becuz you turn me on with your writing.
Why didn't I find you sooner? I'm clueless & forgetful half the time . . . (((HUGS)))
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I am actually laughing out loud here.....you are a pip, barleygirl! You are so right...just because.. read moreI am actually laughing out loud here.....you are a pip, barleygirl! You are so right...just because it is free verse does not mean there should not be some sort of a word or sound pattern. Just because it is sensual does not mean it has to be "in your face" erotic. I appreciate this review so very much....thank you thank you! Lydi**
Hi, Lydia!
It's just Richard here, come to read and review your poem.
As a traditional poet, the initial aspect of your posted piece is presentation, lacking in proper grammar, but after reading, this in no way detracts from it's core essence, which requires considerable skill to accomplish.
The key to this work lies in the first two lines, which (to me) tells the reader all the rest is simply not accessible, but the lure is already set to read-on, to discern and discover what it is that is "just out of reach" … quite crafty of you.
Oh, how I wish it were possible to realize and embrace a lifteitme immersed in such blissful enthrallment of wonder, that so deeply and completely fills and fulfills the senses' with tastes and aromas and sating, soothing spices of galactical measure and pleasure.
What a marvelous imagination and creative skill inhabits your being, Lydia … I thank you ever-so warmly and appreciatively for sharing it with us … smiles 'n hugs to you! ⁓ Richard
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And thank you, Richard, for this incredible review. The thing just out of reach is the next poem..... read moreAnd thank you, Richard, for this incredible review. The thing just out of reach is the next poem...the one that taunts and teases till we write it. I appreciate the time you took to give me your honest opinion of my words. Lydi**
Your words are so tantalizing that after I read them I've forgotten where they began and where they ended because I am so lost in the luminescence of all those tomorrows! So sensual, inviting, no fooling around kind of thoughts! Just wonderful and the image is "PERFECTO", as always with an array of colors, interpretations!!
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As you do, I enjoy finding artwork to complement my words. Thank you so much for your review, Sheil.. read moreAs you do, I enjoy finding artwork to complement my words. Thank you so much for your review, Sheila. Lydi**
"magically compelled", yes, but also magically written... I mean, "ginger scent", that is very compelling, a very irresistible temptation"... it makes me want tomorrows yes, but more that this day, this moment, lasts and lasts until forever has lost all meaning... but sooner or later, that "temptation" will just have to be "touched" Lydi, just as a poem can only be floating in your head until it demands to be written... herein lies the "magic compelled by desire"...
I love your "luminescent" poems Lydi, they are so "nicely" lit..
redzone
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"until forever has lost all meaning"....what a magical line that is, Curt....now you need to write a.. read more"until forever has lost all meaning"....what a magical line that is, Curt....now you need to write a poem using your line! Yes, this is really about a poem floating just out of reach that taunts, tempts, and tantalizes. You understood! Glad you could see the light! :) Thanks for the "nice" review. Lydi**
tomorrow often seems just out of reach...a tasty dance of love...we keep getting closer to our partners...can feel the scent of passion...sensual words.