Could Have Been

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Like an untouched plate of ice cream

there she sat

melting in the heat of the day

sunlight bouncing and beckoning her

willing her to embark on the long road

between silence and expression

but the sun finally set itself

the moon entered stage left

passing 

time 

destroys 

so much

now all that remained was a tilted vision

of what once could have been ice cream

adorning the ungrateful asphalt of life

Reviews

[ANTO]

Wow Lydia - you transported me here. So many people have seen their 'ice-cream' suffer the same fate and I am sure I would have cried my lamps out after such a spill.

"...the moon entered stage left..." - excellent !

great metaphorical lament here my talented friend.
Bravo.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much, Anto! Lydi**

[Trace]

I understand this poem,
I hate that I understand this poem.

Maybe we can lick up the ice cream before it melts.

Trace

[Lydia Shutter]

I'm sorry you understand it too, Trace. Have to lick up the ice cream when you can....never forget that. Thank you for the review. Lydi**

[Kelsey Ann]

Beautiful poem :) I like the metaphor of the spilled/melted ice cream.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks, Kelsey...and thanks for the invite to the contests, but I don't participate in them. Lydi*

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!!
truly amazing...........WoW!!!
a simple incident and such mastetful profound narration........
beautiful.....
i loved it!!!
:)

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you very much, Pushkar. Lydi**

[Pushkar Prabhat]

always a pleasure Mam..........:) :)

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Lydi, the sun finally set itself...
the moon entered left stage...
exquisite poetry ... You are an
inspiration. truly, Pat

[Lydia Shutter]

WOW, two reviews of the same poem. Thank you so much, Pat. Lydi**

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Lydi, ice cream like love
needs to be enjoyed quickly in
the heat of passion...
the coolness of pleasure.
truly, Pat

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you very much, Pat. Have a lovely day. Lydi**

[MsJewel]

Love the metaphor Lydi and the melancholy tone of this one.
I've missed you!

:) Julie

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Julie. I will be around for a while now. Sometimes time does not allow me to read and write as much as I would like to. Lydi**

[MsJewel]

I understand Lydi. I have been in and out as well - life gets in the way. I hope all is well. Hugs, Julie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love the metaphor...amazing how our life can start to melt and then fall out of the cone and hit the cement...just when it was getting so tasty...

[Lydia Shutter]

A cruel twist of fate indeed. Thank you, Jacob. Lydi**

[Kelly Scheppers]

When I first clicked on this and saw the graphic, I couldn't figure out what I was looking at to save my life...that is until I read the first line!

Your absence is certainly felt within the reverberation of your return, Lydi. Who knew ice cream could have such bravado?

[Lydia Shutter]

:) Thank you so much, Kelly. Guess I just needed a bit of a break. I am here for a while again...hopefully. Lydi****

[Kelly Scheppers]

Is everything ok?

[Lydia Shutter]

Yes, thanks.

[Woody]

what a metaphor and what grand final two line! the moon entered stage left is another line of genious.
your poetry is of a unique brand Lydia. smashing!!

[Lydia Shutter]

Woody, you are so kind. I appreciate your review. Lydi**

[~]

Great metaphors you have woven so skillfully my dear. You will your words to always resonate with reader's minds and hearts, and bring us all in awe.
Witty you are, there is no doubt in that :D

[Lydia Shutter]

Always smiling behind the words! Thank you so much. Lydi**