Simple Words On A Page

Artwork by Jo Pickering

Courtesy of  littlemissprinted on etsy.com

In a different light
my simple words on the page
might be eloquent
read perhaps from a different angle
with a bit of sunlight streaming in
from half opened blinds


Possibly a bit of music playing
would soften the syllables
make them more satiny
a bit more palpable


I know, a spritz of perfume
a gingery musky enticement
would morph my mere words
into feathery phrases
whispered articulations
meant for intellectuals


Ah, but the truth lies here
naked and unashamed
not needing or wanting
to be classified
as anything more
than my simple words on the page

Reviews

[David Scott]

I like how you use physical nakedness as the metaphor for our writing.
Being comfortable with "nakedness" is a two way street however. We might be fine with our transparency of expression and wish we could have others be transparent with us, but others might not feel comfortable with either observing the naked soul or baring theirs at all...
I think this world is full of people wishing they were comfortable enough but always needing a bit of a barrier.
I find myself "streaking" my emotions through the half time show of life's little games at times... It usually does not go well. Ha. :)
Here, when it is intimate and for those who seek it, the naked expression is perfect!

[Lydia Shutter]

"I find myself "streaking" my emotions through the half time show of life's little games at times" sounds like a great metaphor on which to build a poem, David! :) You are right....as poets we do inject our emotions into our work, but often readers do not truly see through the words....which is just as well. Thank you so much for you in depth review. Lydi**

[h d e rushin]

and they would be just simple words on a page if there were locked in a dictionary.
but in a poets ability, nothing simple ever happens.

"but the truth lies here
naked and unashamed
not needing or wanting
to be classified"

wonderful write Ms. Lydia.
dana

[Lydia Shutter]

Dana, thank you so much for reviewing this one. Have a great weekend. Lydi**

[Norah]

Such a beautiful, profound piece of poetry...it flows so smoothly. I enjoyed reading this because it is very vivid as well...marvelous :)

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Nora. Lydi*

[Tom]

The great thing about poetry as opposed to prose is that it can be expressed and interpreted in so many diverse and imaginative ways!

An edifying, effusive piece of poetry Lydia, creatively conveyed !

[Lydia Shutter]

Indeed, the interpretation is up to the reader. Thank you so much, Tom. Have a great weekend. Lydi**

[Tom]

And you Lydia !

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we could present the words in all different ways, different lights, different tones...and get all intellectual...but i would rather mine just stay simple enough to be understood in some emotional context...

we spill them so others can sop them up with their spongy minds.

[Lydia Shutter]

Exactly....simplicity is often the best way to go. Thank you, Jacob. lydi**

[PloughBoy]

A lovely , well written poem, Lydia. Some excellent example of alliteration here, such as "morph my mere words", and implied alliteration with "feathery phrases".

As poets, or those aspiring to be poets, we often bare our souls upon the written page, spilled out like crimson blood on stark white parchment, for all to see. And yet, we must, it is our nature to do so. We must be brutally honest, as you were here in your powerful proclamation portraying poetically written words...

Well done!

[Lydia Shutter]

I appreciate your review! Lydi**

[PloughBoy]

You're very welcome, Lydi. It was lovely...

[AprilRN1210]

Simply beautiful!! I love simplicity.... But this is far from simple!! The flow of this was so eloquent and forgot I was reading a "poem"... I love the metaphors which add a "feminine" touch.. Your gentle and endearing creativity here is stunning.. When I come across these writes that knock me down and drag me into them and then take me on this dreamy journey through their mind, I remember why I joined.. I want to learn to do that!! This is poetry at its best... Entertaining, clever and moving.... One of my favorites of yours.. LOVE IT

[Lydia Shutter]

April, thank you very much. Words are as much a part of me as my fingers and toes are! :) Lydi**

[AprilRN1210]

It was my pleasure ma'am... honestly.. meant every word... stunning...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Such eloquence. Some see poetry as an intellectual pursuit but it has to have an emotional soul.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, my friend. That means a lot. Lydi**