Simple Words On A Page

Artwork by Jo Pickering

Courtesy of  littlemissprinted on etsy.com

In a different light
my simple words on the page
might be eloquent
read perhaps from a different angle
with a bit of sunlight streaming in
from half opened blinds


Possibly a bit of music playing
would soften the syllables
make them more satiny
a bit more palpable


I know, a spritz of perfume
a gingery musky enticement
would morph my mere words
into feathery phrases
whispered articulations
meant for intellectuals


Ah, but the truth lies here
naked and unashamed
not needing or wanting
to be classified
as anything more
than my simple words on the page

Reviews

[David Scott]

I like how you use physical nakedness as the metaphor for our writing.
Being comfortable with "nakedness" is a two way street however. We might be fine with our transparency of expression and wish we could have others be transparent with us, but others might not feel comfortable with either observing the naked soul or baring theirs at all...
I think this world is full of people wishing they were comfortable enough but always needing a bit of a barrier.
I find myself "streaking" my emotions through the half time show of life's little games at times... It usually does not go well. Ha. :)
Here, when it is intimate and for those who seek it, the naked expression is perfect!

[Lydia Shutter]

"I find myself "streaking" my emotions through the half time show of life's little games at times" sounds like a great metaphor on which to build a poem, David! :) You are right....as poets we do inject our emotions into our work, but often readers do not truly see through the words....which is just as well. Thank you so much for you in depth review. Lydi**

[Trace]

I cherish your simple words.
Nobody does it better.

Trace

[Lydia Shutter]

(((Trace)))) thank you. Lydi**

[Lyn Anderson]

At once humble and profound, your words may be simple, but the way you put them together is what makes them special.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you very much, KL. Lydi**

[Frieda P]

Very creative Lydikey, you might think your words to be simple, I hardly think so myself, the sentiment always has depth to it, no need for perfume, unless it's Caron's Poivre, then I might roll around in your poem and linger for the night. :)

[Lydia Shutter]

Oh, no perfume from this gal....I am allergic to all of it. So you like French perfume, do ya? Hmmmm...not saying a word, not a thing! :) Thanks, Frieda. Lydi**

[Frieda P]

Ha it was an extravagant gift once, I can't afford the stuff, it's long gone as is the *$#@!*#@...a pleasure as always! :)

[Lydia Shutter]

Smiling here.....perfume does not make the woman!

[asdarkeyesclose]

'would morph my mere words into feathery phrases' left me reflecting on my own poetic journey, i do like simplicity in poetry if it gets too flowery it starts to lose its power, but I do think you need to throw in a good similie or metaphor to tick all the right boxes. this is sophisticated and well-written. fantastic.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much. Lydi**

[Desert Knave]

This belongs on a museum wall. So wonderfully expressed and certain to touch a chord with every writer who seeks the best from their words. ~Jim

[Lydia Shutter]

JIM....it's been too long, my friend. Thank you so much for this sweet review. I hope you are well. Take care. Lydi**

[Sami Khalil]

You words are simple on the page(s) but indicative of the gentleness and inner beauty if the narrator. Pen on...Excellent...:)....

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much, Sami. Lydi**

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome simply....:)........

[Cryingkate]

Oh Lydia,
You done it !
Straight to my heart...........
How Beautifully and cleverly you created that perfect reflection.
Everything you said you didn't need to bring , you did just by the mentioning.
But it did it in a way that sweetly,conjured up the images and smells at our own pace and connotative desires.
Perfect !
I could cry from the peace and relief of the stress where you took us.
Thank you so very much for this journey.
God I needed this !

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much, Kate. I appreciate your lovely review.

Lydi**

[Cryingkate]

Thank You Lady Lydi :-)

[Joyce S. Greene]

Your words need no adornment to make them very special and meaningful, Lydi. Beautifully written verse, I applaud you! Joyce

[Lydia Shutter]

Joyce, such a nice surprise to see a review from you. Thank you! Lydi**

[Rene Salinas]

I come every so often to take visits to Lydia's page. I recognize my sortcoming straight away but what always greets me is how inviting the gesture of her words are. No traps or snares are set about, no demeanour or subterfuge intentions to make me trip. From the first word which is In, to the last, page, it is the musicality and the meaning. And after all that the request of not adorning (too late for me) of not adding to it , of not taking your eye of for one second otherwise you will probably miss it.

There is method on your simplicity though.

Thankyou

[Lydia Shutter]

Rene, you are a sweetheart. Thank you so much. Lydi**

[redzone]

Hi Lydi, it's ironic in ways, cause I understand "simple words on a page" the kind of art that is delicately woven, and yet pulls you into it with such force that the world is changed by it's presence, the kind of poem that is honestly written in everyday words yet steals away your heart...

Lydi one of the important ways that I love about your poetry is that it is both intelligently written and just simply affects your heart... it's why I say "nice" .... Beautiful Lydi. ~~redzone

[Lydia Shutter]

Curt, you truly make me feel special with review such as this one. Thank you, my friend. You are a special person. Lydi**