In a different light
my simple words on the page
might be eloquent
read perhaps from a different angle
with a bit of sunlight streaming in
from half opened blinds
Possibly a bit of music playing
would soften the syllables
make them more satiny
a bit more palpable
I know, a spritz of perfume
a gingery musky enticement
would morph my mere words
into feathery phrases
whispered articulations
meant for intellectuals
Ah, but the truth lies here
naked and unashamed
not needing or wanting
to be classified
as anything more
than my simple words on the page
I like how you use physical nakedness as the metaphor for our writing.
Being comfortable with "nakedness" is a two way street however. We might be fine with our transparency of expression and wish we could have others be transparent with us, but others might not feel comfortable with either observing the naked soul or baring theirs at all...
I think this world is full of people wishing they were comfortable enough but always needing a bit of a barrier.
I find myself "streaking" my emotions through the half time show of life's little games at times... It usually does not go well. Ha. :)
Here, when it is intimate and for those who seek it, the naked expression is perfect!
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
"I find myself "streaking" my emotions through the half time show of life's little games at times" .. read more"I find myself "streaking" my emotions through the half time show of life's little games at times" sounds like a great metaphor on which to build a poem, David! :) You are right....as poets we do inject our emotions into our work, but often readers do not truly see through the words....which is just as well. Thank you so much for you in depth review. Lydi**
There's nothing simple, here, as I know, the power that words have, upon us, whether it be positive or negative. Lydia, your poem speaks with a depth and elegance, few can match.
I like how you use physical nakedness as the metaphor for our writing.
Being comfortable with "nakedness" is a two way street however. We might be fine with our transparency of expression and wish we could have others be transparent with us, but others might not feel comfortable with either observing the naked soul or baring theirs at all...
I think this world is full of people wishing they were comfortable enough but always needing a bit of a barrier.
I find myself "streaking" my emotions through the half time show of life's little games at times... It usually does not go well. Ha. :)
Here, when it is intimate and for those who seek it, the naked expression is perfect!
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
"I find myself "streaking" my emotions through the half time show of life's little games at times" .. read more"I find myself "streaking" my emotions through the half time show of life's little games at times" sounds like a great metaphor on which to build a poem, David! :) You are right....as poets we do inject our emotions into our work, but often readers do not truly see through the words....which is just as well. Thank you so much for you in depth review. Lydi**
Champagne would be nice too, but nothing could make your poetry any more beautiful than it already is. I really enjoyed this Lydi, the poetess speaks and I listen.
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Will, your reviews make me feel so talented. Thank you! Lydi**
Your simple words lying on a page can completely change the aura of the world around me, Lydi. On a bad day, i know your simple words will bring sunshine and comfort. on a good day, i know your simple words will come and double my happiness. and now i have come to associate the scent of ginger with your poetry. ;) your simple words don't need much...true..all they need is a poetry lover...and i'm so grateful for that gift and sensitivity to poetry because i get to fully savor yours! so blessed to read you. A tremendously heartfelt and elegant write, my friend.
I don't even know how to thank you for the wonderful words you have left me here, sweet Sanober. Yo.. read moreI don't even know how to thank you for the wonderful words you have left me here, sweet Sanober. You are a gem in my life...truly. I was fortunate when I met you on the other poetry site. You are a poetry lover and that is very special....but you are also a wonderful poet! Thank you. Lydi**
10 Years Ago
What a sweet thing to say, Lydi. I am very glad we met. I'd be missing out on a lot in life if i had.. read moreWhat a sweet thing to say, Lydi. I am very glad we met. I'd be missing out on a lot in life if i hadn't known you!
10 Years Ago
(((((((((((Sanober)))))))))))))))))))))) my sweet friend. Thank you!