Tepid

Oh the wonders of a bubble bath!

Artwork by Sophie Schubakoff

Twas a bit of a jarring juxtaposition
nearly perfect

           certainly not virtuous
ripples of you

undulated across the surface of my skin
a scuttlebutt of delicious gossip
in which I aspired to be the leading lady

 

Your name escaped my moistened lips
as the bubbles burst
but by then I felt certain
         the bath water would never feel tepid

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

oh my goodness girl!! I didn't know whether to giggle with delight or play with the bubbles and ripples... wheeeew.... "scuttlebutt of delicious gossip" has to be one of the most amusing, clever, and creative phrases I have had the pleasure of reading.. that is a masterpiece in and of itself... what a slow sensual teasing that has just enough playfulness in it... I really enjoyed this one... I am almost certain that the mirror is definitely fogged up in there:)

[Lydia Shutter]

Smiling here...yup, very steamy. Thank you so much, April. It is easy to see why your name is consistently in the top reviewer list. Lydi**

[AprilRN1210]

well, ha.. never thought of it.. I just try to leave an honest, genuine, thoughtful review on other's work.. If I can't do it, how do I expect anyone else to?... southern manners run deep:)
it is always a pleasure... (honestly)

[Lydia Shutter]

You are a sweetie....thank you.

[Frieda P]

Oh my, exhilarating Lydikey! I definitely love the feel of a bubble bath but I must be using the wrong stuff, mine never felt this playfully stimulating. :)

[Lydia Shutter]

It's all in the imagination, Frieda.....the largest errogenous zone of all! :) Thanks for the review. Lydi**

[Frieda P]

No doubt about that ;) Your imagination is a cut above! :)

[Lydia Shutter]

Or below....depending on whom you ask! LOLOL

[Frieda P]

Ha.... they don't get joisey goils then! haha

[Lydia Shutter]

Fuggedaboudit!

[Frieda P]

Absofuckinglutely!! haha

[Lydia Shutter]

That too! LOL

[Kelly Scheppers]

I think between you, John, Jacob and Frieda, this place could run off the steam you exude! April stole my lines, but I've got dibs on our friendship...always a pleasure, Lydi!

[Lydia Shutter]

Indeed, Kelly, we have known one another for a very long time....at least 12 years I am certain. My life has room for many friends, though. Thanks for the great review. Lydi**

[Steve L.]

Love the flow of this Poem!! "Jarring juxtaposition" really starts it off with a bang!

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much, Steve! Lydi**

[Lyn Anderson]

Clever lady, you can make anything sound like anything you want it to. Almost makes me want a bath, and I am (GASP) a shower person.

[Lydia Shutter]

Actually, so am I, but the poem called for an immersion...ahem! LOL thanks, Mandy. Lydi**

[Lyn Anderson]

Funny, baths or showers are kind of like tea or coffee or coke or pepsi -- no real bending on these things.

[Lydia Shutter]

Nope, I want Pepsi, showers, and coffee! LOL

[Lyn Anderson]

OMG you are me!

[Lydia Shutter]

Be afraid, be VERY afraid! LOL

[willweb]

I think I need a shower now...no maybe a bath might feel better. I loved this poem Lydi. The beauty of your words never fails to entice me into a full blown smile.

[Lydia Shutter]

Keep smilin', Will! :) Thank you for the review. Lydi**

[Gandré]

I like your alliteration, you indeed transformed the mundane into the magical! Such innocent eroticism, through few words, that's what I like.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you so much. Lydi**

[Gandré]

it shows some wisdom.. I like it.. wisdom of experience, I like that the writer realizes, the fiction and the non-reality are concurrent. Inside every world is another world..

[Lydia Shutter]

absolutely. fantasy is just a layer of reality.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Ohh my!! The tub will be warm with teasing bubbles torturing the sensitive skin,eh?? Well i had looked at bubbles with awe. Always a childish fantasy. But the way you turned it into something so steamy. I guess next time i jump to the tub- i am gonna feel my body heat up. Your words do delicate work of slowly arousing the reader. Well done Lydi :)

~Sophy

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much, Sophy. Lydi**

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Such a sensuious and delicious piece Lydi. I too love to lay in a hot bath and contemplate until the water is tepid. So therapeutic. This watery creation speaks of infatuation.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you very much, John! Lydi**

[redzone]

WOW Lydi, your poem makes me want to stop taking showers and jump in that tub.. er.. I mean I think you are already the "leading lady" and your poetic waters are NEVER "tepid"... you had me at "twas" and just got better.. "ripples of you
undulated across the surface of my skin" damn Lydi, this is just wonderful poetry... did I mention I love this poem and give it 1000 "nice" hand me a towel before my skin gets wrinkly from those ripples.. er ... ;0)
~~redzone

[Lydia Shutter]

Oh, Curt, you really do tickle my funny bone! (no innuendoes allowed! LOL) You are so damned easy....I had you at T'was? LOL Man, what a pushover! :) Thank you very much. Hope you have a great weekend, my friend. Lydi**